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Unreachable

January 11, 2012
By beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt


Pretty butterfly,
that fans the yellow flower
bless me with your touch.



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on Mar. 16 2012 at 2:48 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

It's cool of you to check out some of my work~

dreamshaker said...
on Mar. 16 2012 at 2:30 pm
dreamshaker, Clarkston, Michigan
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I'm don't usually care for haikus much, but this was lovely. The last line was perfection.

on Feb. 21 2012 at 6:37 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Thank you very much~ I can't wait to read some of your stuff!

on Feb. 20 2012 at 8:02 pm
yellowflower SILVER, Basking Ridge, New Jersey
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I like the use of the word pretty, I probably overuse it too- but theres something about the childlike simplicity of the word "pretty" that conveys exactly what you are saying here!! I really like this poem! I wish I were good at haikus, you say so much, with so little! wow!

on Feb. 4 2012 at 5:00 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Aww thanks for your comment. It's nice to hear that someone likes your work.

.Skyye. GOLD said...
on Feb. 3 2012 at 2:37 pm
.Skyye. GOLD, Oroville, California
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Favorite Quote:
All I have seen teaches me to trust the Creator for all I have not seen.<br /> <br /> I walk by Faith, not by sight

I agree with snaomi, but I do like it :-) You're good at Haikus.

on Jan. 20 2012 at 11:17 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

True---I do tire of the overuse of the word "pretty." Unfortunately, I was too preocupied with the rules of the haiku format. Now thinking about it, I could have used "stunning" or something else. Thanks again for commenting~

on Jan. 20 2012 at 11:14 am
snaomi PLATINUM, Cheshire, Connecticut
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I like this one too, the only thing that I wasn't as in love with was the word "pretty". Is there a more unique way you could describe this particular butterfly?