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An Invaluable Gift

April 2, 2013
By SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
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SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
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I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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It sure was profound,
the joy that engulfed me,
As I stumbled upon;


That poem she composed.
Indeed it is those little acts,
the thoughts, the whispers,

that go unheard and
You never do know who does
remember you nor

who prays incessant.
And when you see that one face
all you feel: ecstasy!

Her mouth forms each word
And her hands, those soft fingers,
etch them to paper.

Her handwriting, I
can visualize, in that, like
many things, we're twins

Each pleasant letter
slowly sinks into me … Delight
Is me and I it.

He had left me alone
For a while now I’d ached.
He just came along again;

And my eyes wet, for
I feel life and truth and joy,
surge through my dyspeic veins

© Shanze Z., San Antonio, TX

The author's comments:
My best friend wrote a poem for me, she shared it on Facebook, I've deactivated mine so I didn't know...Yesterday I found it through my brother's account. Best Feeling IN The World!! :D
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SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND said...
on Apr. 24 2013 at 4:38 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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Oh that would've sucked....Well like I said before TeenInk really needs better website management..Much better..... 
Helena_Noel BRONZE said...
on Apr. 22 2013 at 10:27 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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&ldquo;I&#039;d rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I&#039;d rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye&#039;s a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example&#039;s always clear.&rdquo; -Edgar Guest

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Oh, shush, person! Haha, i was just laughing about the other poem being stuck in "all poems" because I had recently had a sonnet stuck in "Song Lyrics", when i most decidedly did NOT wish it to be. I was merely delighted that TI made a mistake with someone else, and at the same tine delihted that the "mistake" was not exactly misscatogorizing the poem since you yourself acknowlaged that you were merely inspired by sonnets and not actually following the rules. I dont mind where you stick YOUR OWN work, most people ignore the catagories anyhow. But if MINE is mislabled again.... ohhhh WHATCH OUT TI......! [Just kiddin] ;)
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND said...
on Apr. 21 2013 at 11:50 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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YAY! Mission accomplished! Haha... yes you're so right in that ,...it is ever so hard...I hope she posts that poem she wrote for me soon , after she makes an account that is so that you can read it. Maybe check out some of my other Haiku, maybe you'll like them better..I've taken to writing them only a while ago and write mostly Haiku nowadays...will soon start on PROPER sonnets.. LOL :D :D Forgive me next time the categorization shall be proper :P
Helena_Noel BRONZE said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 12:13 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;I&#039;d rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I&#039;d rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye&#039;s a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example&#039;s always clear.&rdquo; -Edgar Guest

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In general, im not fond of haikus. There are some really, and i mean reallly beautiful ones out there that i DO admire, but not many. This was good, though. I might say that you had some really awkward punctuation, which kinda messed with the flow. Not to badly, but i am a dramatic person who places a lot of stock in punctuation and the effects it has, so jt thre ME more than it would most people the end of the first paragraph witn the semicolan is an example. Another thing is the run on lines. I dont mind it when something runs on through to another line, it takes as much talent to use run on lines as to avoid them. I respect both. But something in me rebeled at run on lines going through to another stanza in a haiku. I dont know why.... something about how simplistic the haiku art is... i always thought of each haiku as a measured, but profound thought. And in something like yours, where there is multiple stanzas, it feels odd to end one with the thought still half said. But i really do like this poem. I know how hard it is to write FOR a person, the task is so much harder than writing about something because there is much more depth in the people you are close to, both inyour understanding and in the way they affect you. I admire anyone who can do that. This dosent, i think, adequatly display friendship, not becuase it is a substandard poem, but because a poem is a poem, and friendship is bigger than even a spectacular one. And proof that this one is, in many respects, spectacualr is this: that each discriptive word sounds thought out, strained after, worked for, you worked hard to say how you feel about your friend, and i can tell. Yet i left feeling that this was not close enough, not quite good enough for your friend who i never met. You made your friend seem more precious than yourwords could describe, your graditude seem more than you could explain. Look at it, dont you feel the same way? Well then, mission achomplished.
ThoughtToner said...
on Apr. 17 2013 at 1:19 pm
Yes soon enough!:) 
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND said...
on Apr. 16 2013 at 12:14 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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WHy Thank you! And I think you know exactly how she writes! Haha did you even for a second think I wouldn't recognize you behind those words?? "ThoughtToner" ? Nice! When are you actually gonna make an account here???  You'd be famous! And I'm so happy (literally bouncing) that you've finally read this and that you like it :D
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND said...
on Apr. 8 2013 at 1:35 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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WOW, thank YOU! and really wasn't it SO sweet....best friends are the best aren't they ,,...even though they tease and mess around and sometimes don't talk for days,,, sometimes can't .. : STupid life gets in the way...haha but they're always there when you need them... :D 
And Em! I'm really overjoyed that you liked this that much! Love, Saphira.
ThoughtToner said...
on Apr. 8 2013 at 12:41 pm
I loved it! I wonder how this best friend of yours writes? Yes, the 5th stanza says it all. It unveils the scene, the feel--and that's what makes it terrific! Keep advancing!
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Apr. 7 2013 at 11:54 am
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

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&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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This is beautiful, and flowed extremely well which is extremely hard to do with haikus. I love that feeling when you read a poem written for you, that was so sweet of your friend! As always, your poetry is exquisite!
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND said...
on Apr. 5 2013 at 1:18 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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Oh Thank you for reading it! I'm so happy that you like it! :))) Your comments always leave me feeling happy... And I'm so glad you could understand and relate. Love, Saphira.
Mckay ELITE said...
on Apr. 5 2013 at 12:46 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

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I totally understand what you're writing about. When someone takes the time to write you a poem—which a) is VERY EXCRUTIATEINLY HARD and b) not something everyone is willing to do—it's the greatest gift one could receive. The 5th stanza to me was the best. Great poem as always, SaphiraBrightscales.