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Photograph

May 2, 2013
By ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments

A precious moment
A sweet, treasured memory
A part of my life

The shimmering sun
The wide grins on our faces
The cloudless, blue sky

An old photo
An irreplaceable thought
Never forgotten



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on May. 18 2013 at 3:39 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
iDani-iBeauty, Thank you so much :D

on May. 18 2013 at 12:59 am
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely
- Henry Ford -

- Loved It .. Not One Suggestion . BEAUTIFUL :)

on May. 17 2013 at 3:52 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :D

on May. 17 2013 at 3:23 pm
Court901 BRONZE, Magnolia, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imagniation is not a talent of some people, but it is the health of every person" -Ralph Waldo Emerson

Really nice poem. It might be better with a bit more length, imagry, and description.

on May. 15 2013 at 5:37 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Hahaha no problem :D. Thank you

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 15 2013 at 2:45 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I love the beginning line. And I whole-heartedly agree with the message. Photos are the things—can't find the right word right now—that capture those fleeting moments in life that mean so much to us. Sorry, for taking forever to comment on work. Long week....  

on May. 15 2013 at 4:32 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :D 

PhoebeB GOLD said...
on May. 14 2013 at 5:52 pm
PhoebeB GOLD, Lexington, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Music expresses that which cannot be said and on which it is impossible to be silent."
-Victor Hugo

I love this poem, as well. But, I do agree with Jade.I.Am., the poem could have used a bit more description or imagery. Your poem is absolutely beautiful though! Great job, keep up the great work!!1

on May. 14 2013 at 12:57 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :) 

on May. 14 2013 at 12:34 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

This is is cool, but I wish there was more....imagery, or something, idk. Still good tho!! :D

on May. 13 2013 at 2:40 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :) 

on May. 13 2013 at 10:38 am
MariahPotter PLATINUM, Lansing, Michigan
39 articles 8 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
“We dream in our waking moments, and walk in our sleep.” -scarlett letter

That exactly the way to describe a photograph! I love that. This poems really relateable and short and can be interpreted and imagined in millions of ways! Bravo!

on May. 13 2013 at 5:03 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :) 

on May. 13 2013 at 5:03 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Handban12, thank you very much :). I'm so glad that you like it :D

on May. 12 2013 at 8:47 pm
laurengerhard SILVER, South Windsor, Connecticut
8 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am gone quite mad with the knowledge of accepting the overwhelming number of things I can never know, places I can never go, and people I can never be." -Sylvia Plath

Short and sweet... good job.

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on May. 12 2013 at 4:02 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Hey! :) loved this poem; it really captures a setting forever enclosed in a photograph. Its short yet full of meaning. I hope you write more poems like this! Word choice was very good and teh imagery is phenomenal. Keep it up :P

on May. 10 2013 at 6:36 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :) 

on May. 9 2013 at 6:43 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hey there! I actually thought your word choices were well chosen. You used good, nice descriptive words. I am so happy that you chose the word 'grin' over smile. Usually people would go for the word smile, so bravo. I liked this. I think you conveyed this memory, this picture very well. It's pretty and simple. Your descriptions are very clear and visual. Good job!

on May. 9 2013 at 3:06 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much for this helpful feedback :) 

on May. 9 2013 at 2:01 pm
Someone2know BRONZE, Council Bluffs, Iowa
4 articles 2 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont let your insecurities ruin the beauty you were born with.(:

I really like this poem.. It's beautiful.. On thing I wwould maybe look at next time is word choice otherwise I loved it :)