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The Night Sky

May 12, 2013
By ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments

An endless, dark void
Shimmering, gleaming diamonds
Cover its surface

The stunning night sky



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on May. 17 2013 at 8:01 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you :)

on May. 16 2013 at 4:20 pm
shadowkiss96 SILVER, Selkirk, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"You know you're in love when you can't fall asleep because reality is finally better than your dreams."

It's interesting, but I do suggest that you put a little more to the poem. It seems as though it ends abruptly.. however it is very nice and really personifies the sky.

on May. 16 2013 at 4:18 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :D

on May. 16 2013 at 3:47 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

very good :)  

on May. 16 2013 at 11:49 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :D

OlveraJorge1 said...
on May. 16 2013 at 10:15 am
I liked where this was going but unfortunetly haikus have the tendency of being a little TOO short. Try doing two or three Haikus of 5-7-5 seperately but on the same posting STILL on the topic and I think you can pull off superb haikus. Think of it as an 'Extended Haiku'
Good Tides!