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Reality

July 5, 2014
By --Em-- GOLD, Grand Rapids, Michigan
--Em-- GOLD, Grand Rapids, Michigan
15 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Sunshine and laughter
Butterflies waving their wings
Someone died today


The author's comments:
Hey all you writers out there, this is my first poem on Teen Ink. Please tell me what you think of it; I don't mind criticism.

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on Jul. 9 2014 at 3:04 am
sparrow-at-flight BRONZE, Mill Valley, California
2 articles 1 photo 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing is mind-traveling, destination unknown."

Love this possibly the best haiku I have ever read

on Jul. 8 2014 at 7:58 pm
Sparrow01 SILVER, Appalachin, New York
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The concept of this poem is so profound. People keep living their lives despite what happens around them and what others go through. I cant wait to read more of your writing :)

on Jul. 8 2014 at 9:25 am
Sierra_Reigns SILVER, Burnham, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
Not until we are lost do we begin to find ourselves.
-Henry David Thoreau

I couldn't agree more. So much is said about the reality of life in these three lines and seventeen syllables. Remarkably beautiful! I want more please!

on Jul. 7 2014 at 9:17 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
325 articles 10 photos 1165 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

This is very powerful for a haiku1 Excellent job, especially for a first posted poem! Pleae post more ;)