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Falls Apart

March 19, 2013
By Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 433 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

A pained souls to other,
In the eyes of others,
I fall to the ground the pains of the world,
the memories I losses of you,
a smile elapse me as scars scream the betrayal and pain I've felt for so long,
A single feather sheds a tear for the feelings I cant reveal,
The eyes of a soul that's seen the world as the savages see,
Oh fly fly away into the dreams that keep me at bay,
Try,try again but no one cares about me,
but as I move I keep Hurt,hurt,hurt those around me,
help me see each every day a soul has to die,
so carry me away to die another day,
Carry me away to cry another day,
carry me away to die another day,
A feather to help you remember, help you to say,
the words you could never,
But realize that I have died in the arms of another,
A coffin where my heart should be,
a stone with your name,
I try to move on but your stuck in my mind,
the way you smiled, the way you loved me,
clouds my mind I can't think who am I,
no one nothing not with out you so COME BACK TO ME!
Come back to me my beloved,
Come back to me I need you to help me steer my life,
Come back to me to scream the truth that I lose,
Come back to me to show the truth, instead of this heartbreak,
instead of this pain that never ends
no relief in the misery of this world,
help me fly to where you once began,
No one will help stop the pain to see the upside,
no one but you,
As I approach the cliff edge and fall,
My wings are golden as they prepare to return home,
The water is nothing but your face that en-cloud me with love,
My love I am back to you once again,
As I dive into the water the world washes away revealing another,
For once I am free, for once I am loved, forever

The author's comments:
what happens when you think to hard on the negatives it never ends well

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on Jan. 24 2014 at 4:52 pm
Nella.Girl97 BRONZE, Ashland, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Keep on dreaming even if it breaks your heart."

I absolutely LOVE this poem! I can relate so much! Thanks for writing this...and stay strong and smile!

on Jul. 25 2013 at 10:28 pm
maelstrom14 GOLD, Oak Habor, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
let me not to the marriage of true minds admit impediments...etc

i love your poetry keep writing and dont let anyone bring you down.

on Apr. 19 2013 at 5:11 pm
MeggieMills SILVER, Baltimore, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
I write...so therefor I am a Writer.

So great ! LOVED IT! Itsemotional but great!

mnm08 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 3 2013 at 4:41 pm
mnm08 BRONZE, Grande Prairie, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"A writer needs the industry of an ant, the creativity of a kitten and the hid of an armadillo."- Author Unknown

Loved the symbolism and imagery that u used :) great job!! 

on Mar. 31 2013 at 8:13 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

Love it so much emotion to it!! 5 stars

on Mar. 30 2013 at 3:40 pm
This poem; very deep and alive. Very, very heavy poem; you can feel urge of darkness wrap around you when you read it, but then you feel silver lining that's broken off in the distance when you get toward the end. Very beautiful poem.

on Mar. 29 2013 at 10:33 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 433 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

yep im more to the poems this was the first poem that flow'd togetehr as a song with out critics to make it work so thank you nightrunner

on Mar. 29 2013 at 10:23 pm
nightrunner23 PLATINUM, Greene, New York
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Favorite Quote:
If you treat me like a princess, I'll treat you like a prince.
If you treat me like a game, I'll show you how it's played.

I'm not really good at song lyrics, but I can see this working in a song, it's good, I guess this would be your strength area.

on Mar. 29 2013 at 4:35 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 373 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Loved it! This poem has a great rhythm, energy, and imagery. You really have to pay attention to understand it, and it keeps you hanging on to the very end. You have a great mastery of the rhythm of song lyrics.

on Mar. 28 2013 at 5:32 pm
HopethroughFaithInGod BRONZE, Perry, Michigan
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction" - Issac Newton (i think?)

Also very very good (imagine me talking like im from mexico)

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Mar. 28 2013 at 5:30 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Aw BEAUTIFUL AND AMAZING! It all flowed smoothly and perfectly. Great job and keep writing :)

on Mar. 28 2013 at 5:25 pm
WhiteSwan13 SILVER, Hawera, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Nothing is Impossible & We Live and Learn


on Mar. 25 2013 at 6:55 am
Ray--yo PLATINUM, Kathmandu, Other
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Favorite Quote:
God Makes No Mistakes. (Gaga?)
"I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right." -Liesel Meminger via Markus Zusac, "The Book Thief"