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April 3, 2010
By _NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
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_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
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There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.


–Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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I shook my head and cocked it to the side. I groaned and pulled the covers over my head, only to make me feel trapped and sweaty. It was too quiet...

I lifted up my head from over the covers, and I sighed when I stared across my empty bedroom. The walls seemed to be an eerie blue, and my gasps came out in a hushed echo. It was only 9:00 pm. My parents were usually awake watching T.V or just listening to the radio, but this night was different. I could not hear ANYTHING.

Suddenly, I heard a voice that I did not recognize. The door was an inch open, but it was suddenly pushed full open, revealing a long silhouette that creeped on the bedroom door. I gasped and slowly slipped under the covers, trying to be unnoticable. Then, the blurry image seemed to crawl toward me, and I could finally see who this person was.

© Greg K., New Lenox, IL

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This is the intro to a story I am going to write. I just hope you guys like it! I need some comments and ratings please!
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_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 30 2010 at 3:55 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.


–Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thanks so much! Kind of you to say.  :)

You know, I'm stumped on what to write in my whole story, but I'm still thinking...

Meavescrete SILVER said...
on Apr. 30 2010 at 6:56 am
Meavescrete SILVER, Potomac, Maryland
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I WANNA READ WHAT'S NEXT!!!!!! I LOOVEEE THIS!!! GREAT JOB!
PrincessPineapple GOLD said...
on Apr. 27 2010 at 6:29 am
PrincessPineapple GOLD, Chesapeake, Virginia
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"To love someone is to learn the song that is in their heart, and sing it to them when they have forgotten." ~unknown

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Woah. this totally grabbed my attention for the very beginning! keep it up.
ellyncannon PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 22 2010 at 5:15 pm
ellyncannon PLATINUM, Mexia, Texas
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That which we persist in doing becomes easier, not that the task itself has become easier, but that our ability to perform it has improved.
Ralph Waldo Emerson
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well I hope you've figured it out by now! haha

thanks!!

_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 20 2010 at 4:31 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.


–Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thanks for the comment! Actually, I'm not quite sure of who was at the door. I was just making it random. Lol! And I will check your work, definetly! :)
ellyncannon PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 20 2010 at 4:25 pm
ellyncannon PLATINUM, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
That which we persist in doing becomes easier, not that the task itself has become easier, but that our ability to perform it has improved.
Ralph Waldo Emerson
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You're making me ANGRY!!!! jk

I HAVE TO FINISH YOUR STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

It was really good and snatched up my attention right away! Who was it at your door???????????

Maybe could ya check out some of my work?

_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 17 2010 at 7:06 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.


–Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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I will. Thanks so much for the comment!
--LoveHappens-- said...
on Apr. 17 2010 at 2:40 pm
--LoveHappens--, Fairfield, Connecticut
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"A friend is someone who knows you, but loves you anyway"

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thanks especially read The Pretty One thanks so much and i really enjoyed your piece you should defiantly submit more work
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 17 2010 at 1:59 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.


–Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thanks for the comment! Of course I'll look at your work! It's been a long time since anyone asked me.
--LoveHappens-- said...
on Apr. 17 2010 at 1:45 pm
--LoveHappens--, Fairfield, Connecticut
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Wow that is so exciting I would love it if you continued the story and wrote more I am dying to know what happens. Please I would love it if you took a look at my work too thanks so much

 

LizzyMarie BRONZE said...
on Apr. 16 2010 at 1:47 pm
LizzyMarie BRONZE, Grover, Texas
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Let them HATE, so long as they FEAR...

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It sounds so good... I really wanna read the rest of it...
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 15 2010 at 3:30 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.


–Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thanks! I might be writing the whole story of this, but not sure of an idea yet.

 

WonderDreamer23 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 15 2010 at 1:48 pm
WonderDreamer23 BRONZE, Maplewood, Minnesota
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Shut Up and Live I am the most sexiest thing that happened to you and i know you know it.

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i am DYING to read MORE!!!!! ITS A THRILLER:)
RainbowSpike BRONZE said...
on Apr. 13 2010 at 6:28 pm
RainbowSpike BRONZE, Columbus, Ohio
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Wow, it's short yet engaging! I love it! It's awesome, great job:)
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 11 2010 at 2:30 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.


–Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Well, I am having trouble thinking about what exactly will happen in this story...

 

Anyways, thanks for commenting!

julian GOLD said...
on Apr. 11 2010 at 2:29 pm
julian GOLD, Eugene, Oregon
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The goal is not about living forever, the goal is about creating something that can.

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Wow, i want to read the rest of the story now! You should make it into a book or something!
BobbysGirl said...
on Apr. 10 2010 at 9:43 pm
your welcome!
cHicKEnWaNg1 SILVER said...
on Apr. 9 2010 at 1:41 pm
cHicKEnWaNg1 SILVER, Marietta, Georgia
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It aint no thang but a chicken wang

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it was short yet attention grabbing keep up the good work
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 8 2010 at 4:56 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.


–Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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That's so kind of you! Thanks!
BobbysGirl said...
on Apr. 8 2010 at 4:28 pm
i sure would love to read the next part....your stuff is so good that it doesnt take me that long to read cuz i cant take my eyes off it :} keep up the good job!!! :}