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Haunting Her MAG

April 28, 2010
insertcleverscreennamehere SILVER, Loveland, Ohio
8 articles 0 photos 0 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is not possible to live without failing at something, unless you live so cautiously you might as well have not lived at all, in which case you fail by default"-J.K. Rowling

"Hogwarts will always be there to welcome you home."-J.K. Rowling

It had been a week since he died, a week, though it seemed longer. But it had been a week – the calender on the wall proved it.

She placed her finger on the current date, then moved it up to the day he had died, then one space over to the day he had started … started what? What was the right word? “Haunting her” seemed to fit, but at the same time it didn't. He had always been so caring; he would never have tried to hurt her or scare her. But he was scaring her, she was scared of the way she would feel his presence, feel that he was in the room with her, without seeing or hearing him.

She did hear him sometimes, after she had already felt him there. He would linger in the darkness, before whispering the same words every time: “You didn't save me.”

“I tried to,” she would attempt to say, but the words always caught in her throat, and he would leave before she found her voice.

She ran her finger over the stitched-up cut above her right eye, remembering how it had bled all over him as she was trying to save him. She had begged him not to die, but he had. He had looked into her eyes and whispered her name weakly, just before his heart stopped beating. He had been so weak, he didn't know she had tried to save him. And she couldn't tell him this; he always left ­before she found her voice. He left. Why did he keep leaving?

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This article has 27 comments.

on Aug. 31 2015 at 12:26 am
DarkeRose13 BRONZE, Toogoolawah, Other
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How did he die? I'm waiting in anticipation

AshhKel BRONZE said...
on Jul. 24 2014 at 3:26 am
AshhKel BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
4 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We can't help everyone, but everyone can help someone." - Ronald Reagan

This is so brilliant. So short, yet so amazing! I'm in awe

on Jul. 3 2013 at 6:59 pm
MorningStar921 PLATINUM, Cheshire, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They made their own choice. They chose family. And, well... isn't that kinda the whole point? No doubt - endings are hard. But then again... nothing ever really ends, does it?"
--Chuck, 'Supernatural' Episode 522

This is so hauntingly beautiful! Please continue the story!

on Sep. 28 2012 at 3:46 pm
vballgirl99 BRONZE, Atalnta, Georgia
1 article 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Practice makes perfect"

This is brilliant! I just want you to tell us the background and the ending!! What happens next?

on Sep. 28 2012 at 3:46 pm
vballgirl99 BRONZE, Atalnta, Georgia
1 article 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Practice makes perfect"

This is brilliant! I just want you to tell us the background and the ending!! What happens next?

on Feb. 21 2012 at 2:55 pm
_alannahurt SILVER, Snyder, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
A blank piece of paper is God’s way of telling us how hard it to be God.
– Sidney Sheldon

can you post what happend next... Plz!!!

Luv2Scribble said...
on Jan. 8 2012 at 4:55 pm
Luv2Scribble, Sterling, Virginia
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments
That was really good! I really want to know what happens!!

on Sep. 7 2011 at 2:10 pm
Thief_of_your_heart SILVER, Knox, Tennessee
7 articles 3 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
live long and rock on!

I sooooooo want to read more! You did great! 

on Jul. 30 2011 at 9:45 pm
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
41 articles 0 photos 650 comments

Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

I love, love, love this. Oh, wait! What happened?

I wanna read more :)))

on Jun. 24 2011 at 10:44 pm
RubyRed123 BRONZE, Carmel, Indiana
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life happens when you're busy making other plans"

I think that a good writer makes the reader want more, and thats exactly what you did! Keep it up I loved it! :)

on May. 31 2011 at 8:57 am
LovelyMiss GOLD, Floresville, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 124 comments
Omg!! i loved this so much!!:) how i want more too!

soccergirl23 said...
on May. 13 2011 at 10:13 am
soccergirl23, Adel, Iowa
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment
This was amazing. I want more. Just reading this gives me goosebumps. Please continue.. i wanna know what happened to him

LoveeU BRONZE said...
on May. 11 2011 at 5:01 pm
LoveeU BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
2 articles 2 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is four letters, but it has a biq meaninq." "I love you" and "I like Chicken"

This is soooo good. Makes me wanna read more, keeps me wondering "how'd he die?" "what happened next?" lol I likee this.

Amarajo said...
on May. 2 2011 at 1:15 am
Amarajo, Anchorage, Alaska
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Who is "He"?

on Apr. 19 2011 at 6:25 pm
steroids BRONZE, Deerfield Beach, Florida
3 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't judge a book by its cover."

yes please write more...this is very entertainging but how exactly did he die?

haha4579 GOLD said...
on Mar. 3 2011 at 4:14 pm
haha4579 GOLD, Westfield, Wisconsin
17 articles 1 photo 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's a car, that runs on water!" - Hyde

Its so chilling tough so sweet! Love it!!!!!!!

m_daddy BRONZE said...
on Jan. 17 2011 at 3:55 pm
m_daddy BRONZE, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
1 article 0 photos 3 comments
i love this story     there has to be another       how did he die

on Dec. 21 2010 at 4:42 pm
HelloLove37 BRONZE, Wyoming, Michigan
1 article 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Dance like nobody's watching, love like you'll never get hurt, live like its heaven on earth."

I want more! This was amazing, it left me speechless..


on Dec. 20 2010 at 11:52 am
whateverjuliet BRONZE, Miami, Florida
3 articles 3 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
true love never dies,it only gets stronger with time.

i agree with animal girl , seriously, and i love the last sentence!!

on Nov. 21 2010 at 12:58 am
Mortie PLATINUM, Oak Run, California
31 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whats The Point?

amazing... i cant think of anything else to say about it... ...wow...