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Can You Feel It?

April 15, 2009
By VandaNoon PLATINUM, West Pittston, Pennsylvania
VandaNoon PLATINUM, West Pittston, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
what i can remember
is a lot like water
trickling down a page
of the most beautiful colors
-Marie Digby 'Unfold'


My sister hugs me,
But I feel nothing
With her arms wrapped tight.

(It’s like I’m not even there.)

My mother sobs, begs, pleads,
But I feel nothing
At the sight of her tears.

(It’s like I’m not even there.)

My father stands in front of me,
Intimidating, demanding,
But I feel no remorse.

(It’s like I’m not even there.)

I look in the mirror
At my hollow eyes, sunken cheeks,
And I feel no disgust.

(It’s like I’m not even there.)

My friend visits,
A look of pity,
And I feel no loss of dignity.

(It’s like I’m not even there.)

A doctor stares at me,
His diagnosis said,
And I feel numb.

(It’s like I’m not even there.)

I would change it if I could,
But when this first began,
I didn’t feel my mortality.

(It’s like I was never even aware.)

I write them a long letter,
Knowing I’m running out of time,
And I feel like running from this.

(It’s like I’m finally there.)

But time is short,
And chances were wasted,
And I feel the time.

(It’s like I’m not going to be there.)

Time is gone,
And I fall unconscious,
As I feel the squeeze of my mother’s hand.

(It’s like I’m there.)


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ms.andrea said...
on Nov. 12 2009 at 9:48 pm
This was deep. I try to stay away from vague words, when I write people say oh thats good but I don't really care whether its good or not but can you understand and relate. This poem was touching becuase it shows how precious time is and sometimes we can take the time we have for granite. Its true sometimes it does take tragedy to draw us to one another even if it means we have to embrace the terrible feelings of reality. But that is the good thing about family, whether they are blood related or not they are there through the hard times

on Jun. 10 2009 at 3:09 pm
VandaNoon PLATINUM, West Pittston, Pennsylvania
42 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
what i can remember
is a lot like water
trickling down a page
of the most beautiful colors
-Marie Digby 'Unfold'

Thanks. This is my favorite poem I've written, too. I just wrote it recently.

on Jun. 9 2009 at 6:55 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

W...O....W....is all I could say about this one. Like...OMG!. You are...wow...this is amazing. I really like this one. Better yet, I love it. Amazing, astonishing. I know this one is my favorite.