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Only Stillness

March 9, 2012
By TheCapturedBat GOLD, Belen, New Mexico
TheCapturedBat GOLD, Belen, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
If all else perished and he remained, I should still continue to be; and if all else remained, and he were annihilated, the universe would turn to a mighty stranger.
-- Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights


I wake to find you are not here.
I stir, I tremble, I open my eyes.
Only Stillness can bring you near.

I huddle in my nest of death, waiting for you to appear.
I am veiled in my lifeless guise,
And I wake to find you are not here.

You wait in the darkness. everything I hold dear
Is scattered across the distant sky.
Now only stillness can bring you near.

You cannot feel the tears
Falling over you, you cannot hear my cries.
I wake to find you are not here.

I'll follow without fear,
Though you left me the harder way to die.
Only stillness can bring you near.

I'll flee from the trembling lights, from the sudden noise I hear.
They'll find me in the shadows; in your darkness I'll forever lie.
I wake to find you are not here,
And only stillness can bring you near.


The author's comments:
This villanelle was inspired by Shakespeare's play Romeo And Juliet.

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InkWriter13 said...
on Jun. 22 2012 at 2:05 am
Beautiful writing. Loved it. 5/5! Tragic yet done with a distinctive writing style. Keep it always! Would you please comment on my poems titled Wizard of Words and A Muse?

on Jun. 19 2012 at 8:47 am
TheCapturedBat GOLD, Belen, New Mexico
12 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
If all else perished and he remained, I should still continue to be; and if all else remained, and he were annihilated, the universe would turn to a mighty stranger.
-- Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights

Thanks for commenting. No, I am not this Lydia you speak of.

Masey400 GOLD said...
on Jun. 18 2012 at 7:02 pm
Masey400 GOLD, Ribera, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"Being well-dressed is not a matter of having expensive clothes or the 'right clothes. I don't care if you're wearing rags, but they must suit you."












Louise Nelson

Hey. Cool poem!! Are you the Lydia that went to Waldorf and has an older sister named Abigail?

on Jun. 18 2012 at 8:42 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

That's awesome, keep writing! :)

butterfly123 said...
on Jun. 17 2012 at 8:58 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey! what can i say? absolutely beautiful!! you have talent , don't waste it. i love this piece and your style :D

on Jun. 16 2012 at 9:31 pm
TheCapturedBat GOLD, Belen, New Mexico
12 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
If all else perished and he remained, I should still continue to be; and if all else remained, and he were annihilated, the universe would turn to a mighty stranger.
-- Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights

Yes, this is Juliet's point of view. I was trying to describe her initial disappointment when she thinks Romeo has not come for her turning into the anguish she feels when she realizes he is dead.

on Jun. 16 2012 at 1:50 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

Wow thats great!  When you say this is inspired by Romeo and Juliet is this Juliet's pov of when she was supposedly "dead"? and by the way I really like your style!