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Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments

See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?



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on Apr. 15 2009 at 6:54 pm
_broken_heart_ BRONZE, Cincinnati, Ohio
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I love your poems! All of them actually, your an inspirtion to me.

on Apr. 15 2009 at 1:43 am
madi4545 BRONZE, Buffalo, New York
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amazing

i love it.

(:

you're a beautiful writer

on Apr. 14 2009 at 11:26 pm
moast teen girls wish for alove like that its unfortunet guys are blind and cant see this

jeezkay GOLD said...
on Apr. 14 2009 at 9:08 pm
jeezkay GOLD, Orlando, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
If it's meant to be, it'll happen.

That was beautiful!!

I love the way you write and how everyone can relate to this. Amazing!

on Apr. 12 2009 at 8:37 pm
horseluva BRONZE, Midlothian, Virginia
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THIS WAS AWESOME!!!!!keep on writing!!!!!!

on Apr. 11 2009 at 10:23 pm
contempl8er GOLD, Alpharetta, Georgia
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I love how you put a twist on a classic thought. You analyzed all the pop culture surrounding the idea of love and tore it apart while still looking at it wistfully. Really awesome.

Hillary SILVER said...
on Apr. 11 2009 at 8:07 pm
Hillary SILVER, Concord, California
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I get it, every single word of this poem. It's almost as if you reached into my brain and were able to put every single thought and feeling that i have into just a few words. It's nice to know I'm not alone.

on Apr. 11 2009 at 7:21 pm
life-is-worthless BRONZE, Albuquerque, New Mexico
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i'm happy that so many people can relate to your poem

Alexia SILVER said...
on Apr. 11 2009 at 5:31 am
Alexia SILVER, Shelton, Washington
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i like it. i also don't think love is unoriginal! its the most original classic thing in the world. and you did a good job of expressing that.

carijoy SILVER said...
on Apr. 8 2009 at 11:14 pm
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments
Thank you all for reading my poem! I'm glad that so many of you are able to relate, although I do not wish this feeling upon anyone.

I understand that people may deem the topic of love unoriginal, superficial, and vague, but love is a difficult subject to write about. It is hard to even grasp an aspect of love, and that is one of the reasons why it is an "over used" topic in poetry and literature. It is quite a challenge to put love into words, and I do not believe anyone has ever been able to successfully do it. However, people have the ability to write about some of their feelings and experiences with love, with which others may relate. I was not trying to grasp the entirety of love, but rather remark on an aspect of it.

Thank you, I know my family loves me :) as they are "supposed to" but it's a different kind of love...or rather a different aspect. Which further instates my point about love being a vast topic.

Thank you all for your comments and ratings, they are greatly appreciated!!!

Carolyn

Maxine. BRONZE said...
on Apr. 8 2009 at 5:36 pm
Maxine. BRONZE, College Park, Maryland
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Really good poem. Everyone keeps saying the idea is unoriginal but everyone has different opinions on the subject!

Also, can some people critique my poem please? It's called Little Girl. Thank you.

on Apr. 8 2009 at 4:49 pm
i like this poem. and can relate, but agian the idea is unoriginal. i really think 'love' is an over used concept. but its a good poem. keep writing, be creative.

on Apr. 8 2009 at 1:34 pm
mrbananaman9 SILVER, Tucson, Arizona
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I can relate,but remember your family always loves you

lilgoalie12 said...
on Apr. 7 2009 at 8:11 pm
Wow! great poem it's very deep! I felt like that before but I realized that I have family to fill me with love. Guys are great to have in life and now I even have one in mine but first you need to love yourself and realize that many people love you. Anyway, great poem! I love it!

on Apr. 7 2009 at 1:37 am
mrbananaman9 SILVER, Tucson, Arizona
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KEEP WRITING POETRY THIS IS AWESOME

on Apr. 7 2009 at 12:19 am
Mrz.kookie BRONZE, Charlotte, North Carolina
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i like the poem.....keep up the good work.

on Apr. 6 2009 at 10:37 pm
lele6123 BRONZE, Batavia, Illinois
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I feel as if you did not put much thought into giving this poem a solid setting or underlying metaphor. When speaking of love -- a topic that has been covered so many times -- a writer needs to try even harder to be original. In this poem, lines like “Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone" make me feel as if you are not giving us your real, original thoughts.

DoLL_F@C3 said...
on Apr. 6 2009 at 12:19 am
DoLL_F@C3, Memphis, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"FORGIVING YESTERDAY, LIVING FOR TODAY, NOT WORRIED BOUT TOMORROW." Doll

i love this poem

on Apr. 5 2009 at 3:30 pm
i can so relate. i need to be loved. i feel no one cares 4 me. but keep up the good work darlin. i loved it

on Apr. 5 2009 at 12:17 am
itsjustme BRONZE, Vacaville, California
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wow that is soo true.