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All At Once
All at once you've gone away
 though you never mentioned leaving. 
 Cut off at once my life supply
 and left me barely breathing. 
  
 Maybe it's what you wanted
 to leave me here this way.
 twisted and bleeding and bruised to the core
 in a morbidly bleak display. 
  
 It's cold where I am
 too much hurt and distortions
 the result of a tragedy of epic proportions. 
 I will you return
 sometime when you can
 and maybe we'll be just like how we began. 
  
 But you've chosen your path
 you've thrown me aside.
 I'll do as you'd like
 I swear to abide. 
  
 You've chosen your path
 but I've yet to choose mine.
 All I need is a call, a message or sign.
 Although it pathetic, but I just need to know
 whether you hate me completely
 or only so-so. 
  
 You see I'm holding out for you.. whether you like it or not. 
 Because as desperate as it seems, I just might have a shot. 
 I need this verification, I need it a lot. 
 I need to keep breathing
 Though it seems I forgot.

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This was really good! I really liked the message and meaning behind this poem. There's definitely a lot of emotion behind this.
However, there were a couple of places where the wording was a bit awkward or strange and that broke a bit of the poem's rhythm. Many of these lines just have grammar mistakes so it should be easily fixable.
Here are some suggestions (in the order that I see them):
1. Cutting off my life supply all at once
2. And leaving me there barely breathing.
3. Maybe leaving me here this way was what you always wanted.
4. I will you to return to me
5. But, I'm willing to do as you like
6. All I need is a call, a message, a sign.
7. Although it's pathetic, I just need to know: do you hate me completely?
8. I need to keep breathing even though I've seemed to forgotten how.
I hope this helps! Keep on writing!