The problem with the "anger" line is that the tempo gets slower...its hard to show that in the writing so I slid it down. 

Haha thanks, I try to choose pictures that match. I had some amazing luck with this one. 

The good: This has a really powerful message, and I really liked it!  Good job!

The bad:  I think "race" should be on the same line as "saw their anger".

The random: Nice picture choice!

Yeah, it's on purpose, but I think this is one of the poems that works better when I read it aloud...it's supposed to be read something like this:

But when I noticed the danger (pause)

saw their anger (half pause)

race

So the "race" takes up the second half of the pause, and there is less of a pause between the end of the stanza and the beginning of the next one. 

Wow! I'm impressed. The only problem I had was wih the fifth stanza, it threw me off because it has three lines instead of two. I'm not sure if that was on purpose.

great job. keep writing :)

Thanks! Sorry for replying so late, I wasn't notified by TeenInk that someone had commented...

I'm really glad you like it! And yeah, siblings can be...tough to keep the peace with. 

Wow, I clicked on you only to realize that I've commented on this before! I still really like it :) 

Great job