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Proof That The Writer Doesn't Care How The Character Feels MAG

April 19, 2010
By Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.


He's nervous,
he has second thoughts.
The doctor says he has
nothing to worry about.
Which means he has
everything to worry about.
He starts trembling and shaking,
Which is the last thing they need
Because blood doesn't clean easily.
The doctor says,
“The drugs should kick in soon,”
Which means the drugs
will never kick in.
He starts thinking
about all the bad he's done.
He feels guilty, really guilty.
He starts to pray, but he's too nervous to finish.

The drugs still haven't kicked in yet,

But fear has,
and now he's petrified.
He wants his mommy.
His wife asked
if she could sit with him.
His boys asked also,
but he refused.
He really wants his mommy.
The doctor grabs his tool and starts working.
Now he's terrified.
He starts squirming.

The drugs still haven't kicked in yet.

“Narrator, do something,” he says.
So I say, “Doctor, Please,
I don't think that arm goes in there.”



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on Oct. 20 2010 at 6:10 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

no offense, they have to know who they are. this is the part where i wonder if i should feel guilty.

on Oct. 20 2010 at 6:04 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Bahahahaha.

How very ironically eloquent.

(I dunno, that sentence really made me laugh anyway.)


on Oct. 20 2010 at 5:49 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

<Smirk>

You said something in your bio that "everyone wants to know if I'm a girl or a guy". You just totally gave yourself away...

;)


on Oct. 20 2010 at 5:43 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

thats kind of the idea.sadly you're one of few that know how to re-adjust the wheel "i dont speak french!" "translate it you idiot."

on Oct. 20 2010 at 4:36 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Not really, French is so pretty. Even if I can't really read or understand it.

And anyway, it's easy as pie to just look up a translator on Google.

Love you too <3


on Oct. 20 2010 at 11:17 am
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

hahaha. youre so polite captain:"haha! thank you very much for what you've said. i love you captain! do your dance." thats what it said. now, do your dance captain.

on Oct. 20 2010 at 8:59 am
A_shy_dove GOLD, Hubli, Other
10 articles 1 photo 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never compare your life with others, as you have no idea what their journey is all about.

 i am sorry but can't understand what's written.

on Oct. 19 2010 at 8:39 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

tu es tres amusante captaine. je t'aime. oui, je sais. the french gets really annoying doesnt it? do your dance captain.

on Oct. 19 2010 at 5:01 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Wow. Wow. Wow.

<Stunned silence> <Not bad stunned, of course, Just really amazed-aupplauding-in-the-sixth- sense-sort-of-stunned.>


on Oct. 19 2010 at 3:58 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

haha! merci tres bien pour que tu as dit. je t'aime captaine! fait ta danse!

on Oct. 19 2010 at 7:37 am
A_shy_dove GOLD, Hubli, Other
10 articles 1 photo 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never compare your life with others, as you have no idea what their journey is all about.

ha! Ha! HA!!! I loved it. No doubt that it was selected for the mag. .....

on Oct. 2 2010 at 10:10 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

Merci tres beaucoup captain! and about that weird laugh of yours,...i think you and I have a future together. merci captain

on Oct. 2 2010 at 9:25 pm
LaughingGirl GOLD, Ocala, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Play the music not the instrument. -Author Unknown

Being a writer is being like God. You can create an entire universe and personalities and everything and contol everything. Don't you kinda love it? =)

on Oct. 2 2010 at 9:22 pm
LaughingGirl GOLD, Ocala, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Play the music not the instrument. -Author Unknown

Plus its funny. Kind of a sick funny, but that last line was so surprising and I chuckled, the kind of laugh that you dont want other people to know you laughed at because its so weird. LOL =)

on Oct. 2 2010 at 9:20 pm
LaughingGirl GOLD, Ocala, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Play the music not the instrument. -Author Unknown

I like that. Very unique. The story captures you and you forget the name of the poem until you read "Narrator do something" so you check the title again and reread the end, then reread the entire thing, and youre like "oh. I liked that!" and it makes sense. Coolio

on Jul. 18 2010 at 6:37 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

merci captain, i love how your comments actually mean something. your juice is one i can benefit from. oh oui oui captain.

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jul. 17 2010 at 10:53 am
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
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I must admit I was left intrigued, and happy.  This is a poem I read through all the while thinking that it had its own ring to it, I loved it. Check me out your writing is fabulous :D

on Jun. 25 2010 at 3:22 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

glad good I'm

on Jun. 21 2010 at 3:14 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

stand I under

on Jun. 20 2010 at 12:11 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

Idk, it's like a bent-up power that you could unleash in your words, but you choose not to, but let the implication that you COULD unleash it do the talking, so that it is much more than if you had unleashed it....it makes it much more exciting to read, and much more unique....