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Butterflies Caught in the Wind

October 23, 2010
By Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments

She walks down the hallway,
Invisibly,
Unbeknownst to everyone,
She's a shining star,
And she's going to go far,

He walks down the hallway,
Going to his next class quickly,
Less time spent in the hallway,
Means less time spent on their radars,

They walk down the hallway,
A close-knit group of friends,
But, you have to spill your secrets to get in,
'Cause there's no going back,

You're all just butterflies,
Caught in the wind,
Beautiful and trying to understand,
Butterflies caught in the wind,

She walks down the hallway,
Laughing and joking,
No one can see she's breaking inside,
Because she never lets her smile slide,

They walk down the hallway,
Holding hands tightly,
He leaves her at the doorway of her next class,
And kisses her on the cheek,
No one can see her wince,

You're all just butterflies,
Caught in the wind,
Beautiful and trying to understand,
Butterflies caught in the wind.


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on Aug. 13 2011 at 5:41 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thanks! :)

on Aug. 13 2011 at 4:14 pm
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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This is great!

on Jul. 31 2011 at 2:54 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thank you! :)

on Jul. 31 2011 at 1:01 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
eARTh

At first I thought it was a song, but then it said free verse! SO COOL!!!!!!!!!

on Jul. 31 2011 at 1:00 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
eARTh

Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!

on Jun. 6 2011 at 6:44 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thanks! :)

SamiLou SILVER said...
on Jun. 6 2011 at 3:15 pm
SamiLou SILVER, Lee&#39s Summit, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Imagining the future is a kind of nostalgia"
-John Green (Looking For Alaska)

I agree with itskaylee! it sounds so much like a song i could almost hear it in my head! i LOVE this! i would ave never thought of this metaphor if it had not been for this poem

on May. 29 2011 at 11:21 am
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thank you!

on May. 29 2011 at 10:03 am
itskaylee. BRONZE, Pawleys Island, South Carolina
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love the title! I can almost see this as a song (: 

on Apr. 2 2011 at 6:45 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thank you!

on Apr. 2 2011 at 3:56 pm
TanGem PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
34 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is not a feeling; it is a gift, an act, an ultimate sacrifice. -Me (Em)

Awesome imagery! I'm not into the PDA thing personally, but for the most part it's very well done.

on Feb. 20 2011 at 8:28 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thank you!

Duckie430 said...
on Feb. 20 2011 at 12:58 pm
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
“The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.”
"Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger."

i really like this poem. i love the idea, & it was written very well. good job :)

on Feb. 17 2011 at 7:40 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thank you!

on Feb. 17 2011 at 8:58 am
Tatiel PLATINUM, Washington, Vermont
23 articles 21 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
Against the assault of laughter nothing can stand.
~Mark Twain

I like this! I love how you blend descriptions of the different people together and tell a bit of what they are thinking/feeling, rather than just giving an outward description. The comparison with butterflies is perfect =)