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Brilliance

November 20, 2010
By Savanne BRONZE, Colfax, California
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Savanne BRONZE, Colfax, California
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"I was never going to amount to much anyway, but now, statistically speaking, there's a better chance that some part of me will go on to greatness somewhere in the world. I'd rather be partly great than entirely useless." ♥ -Unwind

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Like a painted canvas

She is luminous, and iconic,

Her mind and focus are criticized,

Then constrained and shrunken.



Her face, although dissimilar to mine

Is breathtakingly brilliant.

She moves with a fireless hope.

Her perception of the future is now.



She has no apprehension,

No sadness.

Imagine the love she has to offer,

And accept her.

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Savanne BRONZE said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 6:03 pm
Savanne BRONZE, Colfax, California
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Favorite Quote:
"I was never going to amount to much anyway, but now, statistically speaking, there's a better chance that some part of me will go on to greatness somewhere in the world. I'd rather be partly great than entirely useless." ♥ -Unwind

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Thanks! for the constructive critism
mgb405 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 11:39 am
mgb405 BRONZE, Plaquemine, 70764, Louisiana
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In this poem, I like the description of the girl. "Like a painted canvas/She is luminous, and iconic" (l.1/2) I think the words you use are perfect. Although the words you use seem perfect, the rhythm isn't.