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You showed me how

December 6, 2010
By Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me


You showed me how
To read and write 
You showed me how
To sleep at night

You showed me how
To dance and sing
You showed me how 
To praise the king

You showed me how
To laugh and smile
You showed me how 
To run a mile

You showed me how
To study and learn
You showed me how 
To swing and turn

You showed me everything 
And now it's my turn
You showed me everything
And I have learned


The author's comments:
It came to me when I was looking at someone I loved..

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on Jul. 27 2011 at 6:36 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thanks! :) 

on Jul. 27 2011 at 6:35 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thanks :)            

on Jul. 27 2011 at 5:22 pm
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 577 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

This flows really well. I love it! :)

on Jul. 25 2011 at 5:49 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

This is super sweet :) Good flow and repetition!

on Jul. 24 2011 at 2:14 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thanks so much! em its kind of about an ideal mother or father, like the perfect parents! 

on Jul. 24 2011 at 2:08 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

i love the repition u use in ur poems who's this about a bf or gf, sibiling,parent what? i enjoyed

on Mar. 25 2011 at 8:04 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

It's simple and sweet and I absolutely adore it! (: The last stanza is a bit...flat. And the way you break up the stanza's can be a bit choppy, but maybe that's the way you intended it, so it doesn't really matter! Anyway, really, really sweet and it seems to have a personal meaning, so it just makes it that much better! Great work! (:

Mayim12 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 6 2011 at 9:34 pm
Mayim12 BRONZE, Elk Grove, California
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GOOD JOB!!!!!!!!!!!

on Feb. 26 2011 at 3:11 pm
I liked it as well. And as for your last line, I interpreted it as that person showed you so much, now you want to show them how to do things too. Anyways, good job. 4/5

on Feb. 25 2011 at 5:50 pm
CharlesDickens SILVER, Georgetown, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I do not agree with what you have to say, but I'll defend to the death your right to say it."
~Voltaire

I really ejoyed this poem, (I tend to like more happy, or nature-centered poems :D)  This is really great!

on Feb. 24 2011 at 7:35 pm
Internal-Love PLATINUM, Queens, New York
33 articles 3 photos 310 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing's black or white, its all just a shade of gray---

















TI "Live your Life" ft Rihanna

the poem is so simple but meaningful at once

And it also sounds like the person showed you everything good in life!! :D very cute, very nice


on Feb. 16 2011 at 7:52 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

Oh I get it now! Thanks for clearing that up, and your welcome. I like commenting on people's work that comment on my stuff too.

on Feb. 16 2011 at 1:32 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

First i would like to thank you for commenting on a lot of my work! Well what I meant by it was sort of like and now its my turn to showed people the things they have showed me, if that makes sense? Anyway thanks again :D

on Feb. 15 2011 at 5:42 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

I don't understand what you mean by the line "And now it's my turn". I like it though, it's simple but it makes sense.

on Feb. 13 2011 at 9:33 pm
alex_gold SILVER, Southlake, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
'You can approach the act of writing with nervousness, excitement, hopefulness, or even despair - the sense that you can never completely put on the page what's in your mind and heart. You can come to the act with your fists clenched and your eyes narrowed, ready to kick ass and take down names. You can come to it because you want a girl to marry you or because you want to change the world. Come to it any way but lightly. Let me say it again: you must not come lightly to the blank page.'

Stephen King

I could tell that this poem has a personal meaning to you! It may be simple, but it is good! That is what matters! Great work!

on Jan. 15 2011 at 3:15 pm
thedegraded SILVER, Medford, New York
6 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
So, this is my life. And I want you to know that I am both happy and sad and I'm still trying to figure out how that could be.

This poem is very simple, but I really like it! It had a nice little beat to it, if you say it aloud, even if everything doesn't rhyme. I especially love that in a poem. That ending to the last staza is kind of a dead beat though. We expect something climatic, but instead you return us to the "learning" aspect when the narrorator is ready for something more. Otherwise, I think it's perfect.

 

Cheers!


AshTree SILVER said...
on Jan. 7 2011 at 3:06 pm
AshTree SILVER, Clarksville, Tennessee
7 articles 0 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Live your art" -made this one up myself. Simple, but true.

I think this is a cute poem. The last line was a little off-beat though. I still think it is nice and I like how you went from you showed me how to you showed me everything. I think this would be even better if lengthened. Because you could describe in greater detail. On the other hand I too like the simplicity of it and the meaning.

No matter what, this is a poem anyone would love on valentine's day.


on Jan. 3 2011 at 8:49 pm
stubborn411 GOLD, Jamiaca, New York
13 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing is impossible, just highly improbable

This is very cute. I would totally send this to my mom or something. Good Job

Coffee BRONZE said...
on Jan. 3 2011 at 6:07 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

It was very sweet, and I liked it a lot. :)

on Jan. 2 2011 at 11:00 pm
oh ok perfect! thank you too, for writing it ;)