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An Ode, to be Continued

June 7, 2011
By TwasBrilling BRONZE, Staunton, Va, Virginia
TwasBrilling BRONZE, Staunton, Va, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The owl of Minerva spreads its wings only with the falling of the dusk" -H.W. Hegel

"Words are our most inexhaustable source of magic' -Albus Dumbledore

By the face of opposition
Should our stances be determined?

In a time of desperation
Can our true selves be revealed?

Through a web of false pretenses
Will we find the candid cure?

From the darkness we are ambling
Shed some light upon the sure?

So with all our doubt to tread on
Might we try accomplish just?

And with how our past can haunt us
Do we finish what we must?

Or slip, in bitter sorrow
With a lack of worthy cry,

That every time we sink an inch
The harder it is we try?

‘Cause with heads that bow in grievance
And eyes that close in spite,

We’ll miss the silent fall of then
To find the strength to fight.

The author's comments:
I wrote this as a sort of battle call to perseverance through tough a reminder to stay true to yourself even when you feel that you are lost.

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on Aug. 9 2011 at 10:56 am
WithPenAndScript DIAMOND, Venetia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I believe that no matter who you are we all leave footprints on this Earth

This is a very powerful, attention-grabbing poem. The lines and teh rhyme throughout kept me interested and the word choice added to teh picture in my head. Bravo!

on Aug. 2 2011 at 10:00 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

This is so strong. I am continually impressed by your poetry: the flow, the word choice, the deep thought behind each stanza.... You have serious talent. :)

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jul. 26 2011 at 11:56 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
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The ending is my favorite, your poetry flows very well. :)

on Jul. 26 2011 at 11:14 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

The rhythm and rhyme is strong, like marching on through opposing forces. The one stanza that really caught me was the third one, though. 

on Jul. 26 2011 at 8:58 pm
TwasBrilling BRONZE, Staunton, Va, Virginia
4 articles 0 photos 79 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The owl of Minerva spreads its wings only with the falling of the dusk" -H.W. Hegel

"Words are our most inexhaustable source of magic' -Albus Dumbledore

Yes i do agree..I was sort of thinking just as in fair, as opposed to just as in only.

on Jul. 26 2011 at 4:41 pm
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
1 article 0 photos 202 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only thing holding us back in life is our desire to stay where we are and not venture further.
~Some random person on the Internet :P

I'm not sure that the line "might we accomplish just" makes sense but other than that, this is great!

on Jul. 26 2011 at 8:51 am
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips."

well...i was just proven wrong. i think THIS is your best work. It was brilliant, i loved the last two lines. Great job.

.Izzy. BRONZE said...
on Jul. 25 2011 at 11:19 am
.Izzy. BRONZE, Broadview Heights, Ohio
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This is great. You are an amazing poet(:

on Jul. 23 2011 at 5:38 pm
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
1 article 1 photo 250 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Poets utter great and wise things that they themselves can not comprehend."

Award Winning!

jasso GOLD said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 10:56 am
jasso GOLD, Damascus, Other
16 articles 10 photos 68 comments

Favorite Quote:
courge dose not always roar, Sometimes courge is a quiet voice at the end of the day saying : i will try again tomorrow

no comment (((( amazing)))))

on Jul. 2 2011 at 8:13 am
RedvinesWTHCantTheyDo GOLD, Zephyrhills, Florida
10 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You make one more comment like that I will wrap you in a tortilla shell and eat you as a snack, maybe with some nice pico de gillo."~ Lauren Lopez in Starship
"If you don't die for something, I'll kill you for nothing."~ Lauren Lopez in Starship

I almost started crying. This is really touching and I think it really relates to anyone. I love your choice of words. Another incrredible piece.

on Jul. 1 2011 at 8:11 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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This is a really good poem. I like Your rhyming scheme. There is one thing I would change, though. The line "And with how our past can haunt us" just seems kind of clunky to me, I think maybe because of the "with how". Perhaps it could be "And with our haunting past" ?