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September 9, 2011
By Mr.Indescribable SILVER, Cerro Gordo, North Carolina
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Mr.Indescribable SILVER, Cerro Gordo, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Hard work beats talent when talent doesnt work hard-Kevin Durant<br /> Pressure Makes Diamonds-Kendall Marshall<br /> Jumping to conclusions just makes the fall a lot harder-Me

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Eyes like diamonds
Crystallized and sweet
Lips that are perfect
Or at least they are to me

Voice like an angel
The way she speaks,i cannot explain
There is nothing on this girl
That you could call plain

She is everything i could ask for
So smart, so fine
Please tell me
Why she cannot be mine?

© Raul R., Monte Vista, CO

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Well it's pretty easy to see my inspiration in this song.
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This article has 32 comments.

ReadWriteBreathe PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 2 2011 at 6:23 pm
ReadWriteBreathe PLATINUM, Pocatello, Idaho
24 articles 4 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;You have to consider the possibility that God does not like you&quot; Tyler Durden Fight Club

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I love this! It's so sweet. Any girl would be happy to get this from you. I love how you describe the eyes. Nice job.
ModernMissBennet BRONZE said...
on Oct. 29 2011 at 9:13 pm
ModernMissBennet BRONZE, Spanaway, Washington
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Really enjoyed this. So sweet!
Mr.Indescribable SILVER said...
on Oct. 26 2011 at 4:29 pm
Mr.Indescribable SILVER, Cerro Gordo, North Carolina
6 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hard work beats talent when talent doesnt work hard-Kevin Durant<br /> Pressure Makes Diamonds-Kendall Marshall<br /> Jumping to conclusions just makes the fall a lot harder-Me

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Haha dont worry bout it guys. I wrote this about two years ago. Me and this girl dated for a few months. but thanks for the feedback. Im glad you like it and i'll be sure to read yours when i get a chance.
Swift13Fearless PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 25 2011 at 9:04 am
Swift13Fearless PLATINUM, Manchester, Other
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&#039;Being FEARLESS isn&#039;t being 100% not fearful, it&#039;s being terrified but you jump anyway&#039; - Taylor Swift

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Awwh this is cute!
Lexie96 GOLD said...
on Oct. 24 2011 at 6:41 am
Lexie96 GOLD, Havana, Illinois
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Now Cinderella don&#039;t you go to sleep, it&#039;s such a bitter form of refuge, oh don&#039;t you know the kingdom&#039;s under siege, and everbody needs you. - The Killers

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I got to agree, if you haven't already ask her out. Good luck! Think that you could check out some of my work? Please?
Glory SILVER said...
on Oct. 17 2011 at 2:00 pm
Glory SILVER, Minton, Other
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Life is hard, but it&#039;s harder when your stupid -<br /> John Wayne

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Sooooooo cute!! I'm a big fan of this one!
SassyJones GOLD said...
on Oct. 15 2011 at 8:28 pm
SassyJones GOLD, Los Altos Hills, California
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&quot;We make our fourtunes, and we call them fate&quot; earl of beaconsville.

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i hope this girl knows how you feel. or else its a shame. read some of my stuff? thanks. ask her out 
XxXBella.AmoreXxX said...
on Oct. 13 2011 at 3:54 pm
XxXBella.AmoreXxX, That Small Suburb By Manhattan., New York
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&quot;But can you love someone, who doesn&#039;t love you back?&quot; <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> &quot; I&#039;d rather laugh with the sinners, than cry with the saints&quot;

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i luv this so much
ArielleArmageddon PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 9 2011 at 12:26 pm
ArielleArmageddon PLATINUM, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
if i cant hear your heartbeat, you&#039;re too far away

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i rly love this. it made me smile and you should write more work about this "new girl".... i think she inspires you well
MissUnderStood.2011 BRONZE said...
on Oct. 4 2011 at 2:06 pm
MissUnderStood.2011 BRONZE, Sugarhill, Georgia
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Romans 12:2-4 Read It!!

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rey good.. Readsome of mines and add me on Facebook Swayze Spencer
Mr.Indescribable SILVER said...
on Oct. 1 2011 at 10:53 am
Mr.Indescribable SILVER, Cerro Gordo, North Carolina
6 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hard work beats talent when talent doesnt work hard-Kevin Durant<br /> Pressure Makes Diamonds-Kendall Marshall<br /> Jumping to conclusions just makes the fall a lot harder-Me

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Thanks for the feedback. im glad you liked it. I'll be sure to read your work when i can.
Blue4indigo PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 30 2011 at 4:58 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I&#039;d rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn&#039;t do.<br /> -Red Scott

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Good job! The rhyme is very good, and I really like how simple and true-sounding this is. Perhaps try to add some unusual imagery to make the poem less ordinary?

Could you please read some of my work, rate, and tell me what you think? I'd appreciate it :)