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As tears fall

August 13, 2012
By blakrose PLATINUM, Anchorage, Alaska
blakrose PLATINUM, Anchorage, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"the biggest mistake you can make in life is to give up." - Rebekah Hanson
"think outside the shoe." - Jessica Cox
"angel wings break, so fly while you can." - Rose Smith


As tears fall down my face,
I feel so out of place,
Every on else chooses to smile,
I myself haven't for a while.

As tears fall,
As rivers flow,
I feel so small,
Will any one know?

As tears fall,
I think about dying,
Just sitting all alone,
Crying and crying.

As tears fall,
I think of you,
Got me thinking,
Should I laugh,
Should I cry,
Should I live,
Or should I die?

As tears fall down,
I too hit the ground,
The pain is to great,
With out you around.



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on Aug. 14 2012 at 6:52 pm
Anonymous01 PLATINUM, Baldwinsvillle, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"There is nothing to writing. All you do is sit down at a typewriter and bleed."
-Ernest Hemingway

This poem is truly beautiful. You captured the emotions perfectly. The only criticism i have is that in the second to last line, "' to great'" should be "' too great'". Nothing too major. (: BRILLIANT piece though.

And I would really appriciate it if you could maybe check out one of my pieces and tell me what you think. Any advice that you could give would be greatly appriciated.