Concert | Teen Ink


March 26, 2013
By Labradorian PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
Labradorian PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
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The trill of a solo flute
Flutters, dances ‘round my head.
The mellow whine of violins
Dangle gently, spider threads
Of melody entwine with
Trumpets, blowing sorrow, wishes, aches.
Sitting in my concert chair, I hear ribbons turn to
Snakes, hiss and rattle, cello moans
The clatter of percussion, bones
Of skeletal new rhythms play
The CRASH of symbols
Dawns new day.
A light, a lark, rekindled tune.
A gentle call, birds bade the moon
Goodbye, awake I raise my head
In awe of music, spider threads.

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on Aug. 1 2013 at 8:36 pm
Labradorian PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
34 articles 0 photos 52 comments
Thank you again for commenting. I look forward to reading more of your work :)  

on Jul. 28 2013 at 3:45 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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Hey there! Once again, bravo on the immaculate attention to small details! Really, it's spectacular! I think you did a job well done on the rhymes, it seems to flow very well. And the count was also good. I love the way you describe each instrument and the way it impacts the next sound. I am really impressed with the way you describe each sound as well.. I feel that I can hear them in my head and it's really nice. I love the way you emphasize the word 'crash' and describe it as dawning a new day! You ended it very well! Great job!