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Pencil Feathers

April 10, 2013
By GuardianoftheStars GOLD, Shongaloo, Louisiana
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Pencil feathers
So gentle
So fine
It seeps down my page
Whisper soft
Wind delicate
My pencil feathers
Sprout into wings
One, two, three
They spread and fly
Off of my pencil
Out of my paper
Into the world
And all that is left
Is the ashes of my eraser’s dust.

© Rosalee M., Lowell, MA

The author's comments:
I think drawings are like birds. They start off so simple and soft and change into a wonderful creature that takes flight and enters people's mind in a way they'll never forget.
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Beila BRONZE said...
on Feb. 24 2015 at 12:01 am
Beila BRONZE, Palo Alto, California
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The poem is beautifully written, and the metaphor is more lovely still. I like the fact that you ended with a nod to the eraser, an important yet too often overlooked partner of the pencil bird. :)
GuardianoftheStars GOLD said...
on Mar. 22 2014 at 10:55 pm
GuardianoftheStars GOLD, Shongaloo, Louisiana
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"Let's tell young people the best books are yet to be written; the best painting, the best government, the best of everything is yet to be done by them."
-John Erslcine

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Thank you! 
Kestrel135 PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 21 2014 at 7:55 pm
Kestrel135 PLATINUM, Waterford, Connecticut
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This was a great metaphor, especially for me since I am always comparing nature - often birds - to works of art. In a way, nature is its own work of art, and since we arouse from nature, our art parrellels its own. I really like this work. Keep writing! 
GuardianoftheStars GOLD said...
on Aug. 2 2013 at 10:01 pm
GuardianoftheStars GOLD, Shongaloo, Louisiana
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"Let's tell young people the best books are yet to be written; the best painting, the best government, the best of everything is yet to be done by them."
-John Erslcine

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I'm glad you liked it! :D
E.J.Mathews GOLD said...
on Jul. 30 2013 at 2:34 pm
E.J.Mathews GOLD, International Falls, Minnesota
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Awesome! This really describes writing, or even drawing really well. I wasn't quite sure which one you were going for, but it doesn't matter, it was still fantastic! Great work! I don't write a lot of peoms, so I don't have the eye to look for mistakes in this, but it all looks great for me!
GuardianoftheStars GOLD said...
on Jul. 24 2013 at 11:50 am
GuardianoftheStars GOLD, Shongaloo, Louisiana
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"Let's tell young people the best books are yet to be written; the best painting, the best government, the best of everything is yet to be done by them."
-John Erslcine

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Thanks so much! :)
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on May. 21 2013 at 5:16 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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Omg! I love how I can just sink into the poem and disapear within its words. I can totally understand your perspective and I love the imagery, especially when you describe the eraser dust as ashes and how you compared everything to wings. Keep it up :)
GuardianoftheStars GOLD said...
on May. 18 2013 at 10:36 pm
GuardianoftheStars GOLD, Shongaloo, Louisiana
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Aww. ^__^ Thanks so much! That means a lot!!!
LexusMarie PLATINUM said...
on May. 18 2013 at 11:28 am
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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Hey there! I love the title, it feels so simple and pretty to me, I really like it. And the picture goes really, really well with this. I also love what you put into the author's comment. I could not have said that any better, I completely agree. And I love the format of this poem. The lines are so short, but the words chosen on each line are so magical and pretty. I loved this. You made a simple observation into something wonderful. The descriptions are very vivid. And the colors in the picture you chose seem to drift into the poem and mix. I LOVE this.