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Second chances and hidden feelings

April 22, 2013
By Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 433 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

A second chance as turn an ran i try to run,
but your long gone a single tear marks my fears of never loving,
As the shards of glass comes suffocating my last breaths
You touched my heart when you opened your mouth,
You made me cry when you screamed your feelings
You made me think when I saw you alone
You made me feel when I became friends
You made me die when you took your life
When i see a ghost i think the most ts my soul trying to tell me to move on from the despair,
I feel but then i look and its you laughing at what could be ,
like a broken mirror never giving up on my misery
You don't know me you see the insanity in my mind as the monsters in my head,
You think shes a monster she cant feel,
Shes a ghost she can't hear, shes a ghoul she cant scream ,
Shes alone she wont be seen,
I am real I can hear as you make your names as you kill my soul,
I can feel the pain and misery of being unwanted by the likes of you,
I can scream as this world kills me all so the monsters might be in my head,
They might be ripping me apart slowly leading to my destruction,
but it seems the monsters are my only friends and you humans are nothing but a insane side of this world

The author's comments:
when second chances and hidden feelings collide after suicide of a friend or love one your feelings hide and sometimes the only way to end it is scream away the monsters more times then it should.

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This article has 7 comments.

midnightwoah said...
on Aug. 4 2014 at 11:09 pm
midnightwoah, Monett, Missouri
0 articles 0 photos 188 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We accept the love we think we deserve." -Stephen Chbosky

This reminded me of my own poem/ free verse, "In the Moment". I also thought about you having the readers feel as if this free verse was supposed to be written in 2nd person. I enjoyed reading the contrasts!

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jul. 26 2013 at 11:13 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

The thing about your writing style Luna, is that it sucks the reader in and never spits them out. I had to read this over and over becuase of its deep meaning and deeper metaphors. The ending speaks honesty: "But it seems the monsters are my only friends and you humans are nothing but a insane side of this world." It makes me want to think about our purpose and everything in between. Well done; I believe this shouldve gotten Editors Choice!

on Jul. 25 2013 at 10:21 pm
maelstrom14 GOLD, Oak Habor, Washington
14 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
let me not to the marriage of true minds admit impediments...etc

i feel like this sometimes. Ive never expeirenced someone taking their own life though i hope i never do. and im sorry if you have. good poem very good.

on May. 23 2013 at 4:25 pm
TanviKusum DIAMOND, Gurgaon, Other
89 articles 4 photos 197 comments

Favorite Quote:
All men who have achieved great things have been great dreamers.
Orison Swett Marden

"The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin

we speak in hushed voices so as to not wake our memories

As I said, it touches the heart. We all have things we have to fight with. amazing :D

on May. 20 2013 at 3:16 pm
Stuck_In_Madness BRONZE, Lake Mary, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You can't reach the top without once starting from the bottom."

I really  liked this because i understand what you mean by fighting the monsters and screaming out pain. im not a huge fan of freeverse but i thought the flow worked to your advantage and you have done a lovely job with this piece:)

on May. 4 2013 at 9:59 pm
KayliLovesYou PLATINUM, Lincoln, Nebraska
25 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont cry because it is over smile because it happened

great work it projects sadness,feae,and depression great job i love how u worded it great job.  

on Apr. 29 2013 at 7:13 pm
Brittany-NamedTheFluffMastahNumber2 GOLD, Milford, Connecticut
15 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
The person that you'd take a bullet for is behind the trigger.
Miss Missing You - Fall Out Boy (:

this was really amazing.. really nice job with this