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Two Doors

April 28, 2013
By Jeeves12345 GOLD, Santa Maria, California
Jeeves12345 GOLD, Santa Maria, California
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Favorite Quote:
It's okay, I won't judge.


Two doors are in front
I don’t know which one to chose
To go through either door, I need a key
Both doors sting like a bee
It’s almost like I need a muse
One door flows with song
The other, gloomy, dull and smashed
Leaning toward the music, I pick up a key
Opening the door a surprise jumps out
Musical talent, now within me
Feeling as if I can fly
Piano keys on the sidewalk
And a relaxing sensation all around
Different emotions surround this place
No one can live without music, for this is true
Just take a look around, and call out to your muse


The author's comments:
I had to write this for a school poetry project.

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on Aug. 1 2013 at 8:57 pm
Jeeves12345 GOLD, Santa Maria, California
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Favorite Quote:
It's okay, I won't judge.

Thank you.

on Aug. 1 2013 at 8:57 pm
Jeeves12345 GOLD, Santa Maria, California
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Favorite Quote:
It's okay, I won't judge.

I couldn't rhyme it otherwise my English teacher would make us rewrite it. But i would have liked it to of been that way. And thank you.

on Aug. 1 2013 at 8:56 pm
Jeeves12345 GOLD, Santa Maria, California
13 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's okay, I won't judge.

I agree all the way, thank you too.

on Aug. 1 2013 at 8:55 pm
Jeeves12345 GOLD, Santa Maria, California
13 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's okay, I won't judge.

Thanks. And the only reason is doesn't rythme like it sounds like it should is because my Emglish teacher told us not to make it rhythe or she would make us rewrite it. Unless it was accidental.

on Jun. 4 2013 at 10:31 am
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
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All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Another great one! I really like this one with the visuality of the doors being choice A and choice B! It's was really intriguing and interesting! Nice job!

on May. 17 2013 at 3:13 pm
Court901 BRONZE, Magnolia, Texas
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"Imagniation is not a talent of some people, but it is the health of every person" -Ralph Waldo Emerson

Like I said in "Venegful Monster" I like your writing and you are a good inspiration. I like this poem because, as a musician, I know this "emotions" and "sensations" brought forth from music. Good imagry and I agree with LexusMarie about the rhyming.

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on May. 15 2013 at 6:25 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

I like how you use two doors to convey two different paths in life. The last line was by far my favorite of the whole poem. Music is vital to life. Can't live a day without my daily dose of it. I don't think you should quit writing. Just keep at it. Keep writing as much as you can. No one's born a great writer. But everyone can become a good writer, in my opinion. That is if you're passionate enough and willing to give it your all. 

on May. 13 2013 at 6:02 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hey there! I like the title, it's different than the typical, two paths. So, I am glad you changed that up a bit. I think the simplicity int he poem is nice. The concept of this was a good one.. I like it. I thought it was nice how this door lead you on a musical path. That was unexpected. You give the reader good visuals. The only thing here is I thought your rhymes were a little off. It would rhyme at some spots and others it wouldn't.  But, other than that, good job.