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The freak and the dreams

June 7, 2013
By Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 433 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

The madness pulls and pushes sending me into a spiral
I can't believe what I do what I say what I do because its not me,
its the voices that control I am their puppet made of wood the heart cracked and eaten by the termites of the madness,
taking whole I try to scream out for help but no open helps a freak like you,
your useless your nothing you should just die they scream I give in but not yet I live through this being called freak,loser, nothing, trash battling the invisible battle who will win I don't know because I am weak,
I am done with the madness,
and this world I live in
like the forgotten souls of this life flying away trying to do right pushed down never to fly,
but they stand tall trying not to give in give in to the scream,
give in to the yells,
give in to the love that will never end well,
And fly back to where they came with their golden wings clipping the clouds
their dreams aloud never to fall never to crumble but to fly back to the love of their father that we mainly forget about but never again,
no more of the lies no more of the tears they will fly with the others that have kindred their hearts and soar,
to where no one but we have seen in the dreams of the angels in the dreams of the river we will fly,
we will die,
but we will be born into the angels that died not giving in

The author's comments:
We all have been through this, the bullies, the words so this is tribute to the freaks out there theirs still hope

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This article has 9 comments.

Siyana SILVER said...
on Nov. 3 2013 at 7:18 pm
Siyana SILVER, Toronto, Other
8 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
forgive and forget but never forget what you have forgotten.

amazing tittle followed by amazing writing. 

on Oct. 19 2013 at 10:24 pm
Calliashi SILVER, Litchfield Park, Arizona
6 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
The man with the key is king and honey, you should see me in a crown. ~James Moriarty

Beautiful. I found this very relatable. Its emotion was well tuned and your metaphors were spot on, really painting a picture in my kind. I really liked it :)

on Aug. 2 2013 at 11:30 am
LittleMissLostInParadise GOLD, Cumberland, Virginia
19 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We live in a strange bubble"
-Brian Molko

I enjoyed this. yet another beautiful peice of poetry from you. :) Your rhyme and rythem was fantastic! Keep at it!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Aug. 1 2013 at 4:54 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I enjoy the emotion in this. It's very relatable and sincere. The anger imbued with the deep sadness. (A few typos here and there, which you can easily correct.) Other than that really good. Don't let these bullies take you down. Inwardly, they suffering just as well. 

on Jul. 31 2013 at 8:54 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hello! Thanks for the comment you left me! I felt the anger in this poem, it was very real. I also felt the sadness. You did a great job with emotion. I enjoyed the small bits of rhyme in here as well. I also like the repetition of 'give in' as it had a strong effect to the poem. Good job!

sarah98 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 30 2013 at 10:01 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
1 article 0 photos 405 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

i love this! my most favoriteee part is the line "i cant believe what i do what i say what i do because its not me" i just love it soooooo much

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jul. 26 2013 at 10:58 am
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Beautiful and elegant; well done, Luna! It's very eerie and serene, keeping the reader on the edge of their seats. I love the figurtive language you used throughout this poem. My absolute favorite line is :"I am their puppet, made of wood, the heart cracked and eaten by the termites of madness.." It really gave me a tingling down my spine. In addition, usually bullying poems are overused and cliche, but you've turned an overused topic into one that is not only interesting, but captivating as well.  What an amazing poem that really describes what bullying feels like; you are going to go sooooo far, Luna! :P 5/5 stars no doubt.

on Jul. 25 2013 at 10:11 pm
maelstrom14 GOLD, Oak Habor, Washington
14 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
let me not to the marriage of true minds admit impediments...etc

Sounds like its real and it ment something to you as well. i like it a lot

on Jun. 15 2013 at 3:40 pm
SoulPoetry PLATINUM, Sierra Madre, California
29 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I will work harder" (animal farm boxer the horse)

I love this poem! so deep and emotional