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A Work in Progress MAG

November 9, 2008
By QS724 SILVER, Carpentersville, Illinois
QS724 SILVER, Carpentersville, Illinois
9 articles 0 photos 3 comments

I get nervous … speaking to a crowd.
Not in a crowd, but to one.
In a crowd my voice is commanding and enthusiastic,
But to one, I am weak,
My hands shake, my voice quivers.
Like I am afraid.
Maybe I am afraid, afraid that what I say and do don’t matter.
That my very existence on this earth is meek and unnecessary,
That I just take up space. I am afraid to be small.
That simple fact causes me to be loud and exuberant,
But is not overshadowed by the fact that I am still a work in progress,
And like those before me,
Will probably always be a work in progress until I have taken my last comforting
Going to a place where I can speak with confidence,
Without the shakes and pain of this bleak life of worry and profit.
To a place where I will no longer be a work in progress.

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on Aug. 27 2011 at 6:52 pm
livelovesmile GOLD, Gaithersburg, Maryland
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I am like a star burst. A juicy contradiction. I'm hard to figure out, but when you get to my center, your suprised! It's not what you thought it would be, huh.

this poem is beautiful! well done! 

i would appreciate if you would check out my poems for i am always looking for feedback! Thanks!


on Aug. 5 2011 at 7:50 pm
bEllAhOPe BRONZE, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
\"Flying is simple... you just throw yourself at the ground and miss.\"

The message portrayed was amazing, but the delivery was slightly weaker. From the title, I might have expected a little more. Overall, however, I appreciated the writing. Well done.

on Mar. 4 2011 at 10:56 am
thegirlinthedress GOLD, Ocklawaha, Florida
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I love this! Great job!!!

gleek1234 GOLD said...
on Jan. 29 2011 at 6:25 pm
gleek1234 GOLD, Burlington, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
You did let me go you left me broken and heartless, crying out for help, with no one to answer my calls-Shilpa Pierpont-Hale ( poem) Love hurts

me too i hate speaking in front of people one time i did a book report and  i almost cried because my voice shakes and i was really scared i was gonna mess up. band i did but that was only because i was telling mi self i would and  not believing in my self. i know how her and you feels. i have to read my poem for my next school town meeting and i am really scared. but i practice in front of a mirror and w/ my mom it works. and i Imagen i am reading it in front of my whole fam. try it it really helps. sometimes when i am nervous i tend to read really fast i need to work on that.

on Jan. 19 2011 at 1:26 pm
this poem spoke to me, i feel you man!

DrDoofenTess said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 1:22 am
DrDoofenTess, Dubai, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Hope for the best .... Expect the worst .

hey serenity

i bet almost half of the comments you get on here will be by people who find it hard to speak up in a crowd .... im one of them too. in fact i was jus tellin my friend yesterday about my stage fright n then today i read this

freaky co incidence huh :P

ur poem shows acceptance of the fact of u are at the moment and not lettin it take u down at the same time ... it shows all the hopes and promises u hold for ur future crowds :)

loved it n i will for sure check out ur other works

nancyyy BRONZE said...
on Sep. 14 2010 at 7:44 am
nancyyy BRONZE, Spotsylvania, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The bigger the dreams, the smaller the competition"

I get nervous speaking to a crowd too. Your poem put the feeling into words.

I like how you said "I am still a work in progress, and like those before me, Will probably always be a work in progress until I have taken my last comforting Breath" The line was very thought provoking for me and led me to reflect on the fact that nobody is perfect and everyone always strives to be better.

on Aug. 18 2010 at 9:39 pm
Smileyky108 BRONZE, Venetia, Pennsylvania
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Ahh. I think my comment got screwed up. I was saying that I think that a lot of people will be able to relate to this poem, and how beautifully written it is. (:

on Aug. 18 2010 at 9:37 pm
Smileyky108 BRONZE, Venetia, Pennsylvania
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I love this. I love the idea of being able to go with the crowd but not being able to speak

on Aug. 18 2010 at 4:31 pm
silent_reader BRONZE, Columbia, Maryland
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"I cannot live without books." - Thomas Jefferson

really good

QS724 SILVER said...
on Jun. 25 2010 at 11:22 pm
QS724 SILVER, Carpentersville, Illinois
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thanks guys your comments mean so much to me! read my other stuff and comment on those as well if you have the time

on Jun. 1 2010 at 8:02 pm
when_we_were_thieves GOLD, Boise, Idaho
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I really liked this piece. This is a lot how I am, kind of eye opening. Thanks so much!

on May. 28 2010 at 11:17 am
JasminePinto BRONZE, Anywhere, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
we make a living by what we get but make a life by what we give- Winston Churchhill

Don't quit while the night is darkest for its just a while till dawn- Jill Wolf

TRULLY AMAZING, words really cant even describe how good this is

on May. 17 2010 at 4:47 pm
sunnyhunny PLATINUM, Litchfield, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind."

Great job.  I thik about similar things sometimes.  5 stars.

Eric DeMeo said...
on Apr. 30 2010 at 9:39 am
Eric DeMeo, Saugus, Massachusetts
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Fantastic free verse. Good job!!!!!

(:) jojo (:) said...
on Apr. 8 2010 at 1:17 pm
um its a freeverse so it can be anything the writer wants it to be. btw i LOVED IT!!

on Mar. 19 2010 at 9:17 am
AllysenBursex3 SILVER, Gibsonton, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"I don't listen to the radio." <3

That was hot; I like it (:

bilbogirl GOLD said...
on Feb. 6 2010 at 5:11 pm
bilbogirl GOLD, Townsend, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
If you cant rock it, dont even bother trying.

Definately an amazing piece, very well written. I like that I can feel the nervousness in front of one. Can't wait for more. 5 stars!

on Jan. 10 2010 at 8:00 pm
dan_wills07 SILVER, Fort Wayne, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Live Life to the Fullest

This is very talented and it showed courage. 5 stars!

gabee_p SILVER said...
on Sep. 24 2009 at 4:34 pm
gabee_p SILVER, MOUNTAIN HOME, Arkansas
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sweetness thanx!!