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A Play On A Play On Words MAG

November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark


When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.



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on Nov. 2 2010 at 9:39 am
shellbi123 SILVER, East Jordan, Michigan
9 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"don't say sorry if your not"

i completely agree with what your saying, he's writing is absolutly amazing

on Nov. 2 2010 at 9:37 am
shellbi123 SILVER, East Jordan, Michigan
9 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"don't say sorry if your not"

and as u said to " john smith" i don't think they know what they are saying when they say it's  cliche

on Nov. 2 2010 at 9:33 am
shellbi123 SILVER, East Jordan, Michigan
9 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"don't say sorry if your not"

this is amazing! i loved it keep writing the image is really cool

on Nov. 2 2010 at 8:31 am
LilStinka SILVER, Lynden, Washington
5 articles 4 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
Advice is what we ask for when we already know the answer but wish we didn't. - Erica Jong
Tis an ill cook that cannot lick his own fingers. - Shakespeare

Wow, this is really good:D I love how I can never guess what's coming next!

on Oct. 11 2010 at 12:59 pm
WritingJulia SILVER, Binghamton, New York
6 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Kind words can be short and easy to say, but their echoes are truly endless." -Mother Theresa

I could just drown in the beauty of this for hours! 

on Oct. 11 2010 at 12:42 pm
Michelle24 GOLD, Riverwoods, Illinois
19 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind."-Dr. Seuss

"Life is not measured by the breaths we take but by the moments that take our breath away."-Unknown

This is fantastic. I keep on reading it over and over. I like the way you use the words!

on Oct. 11 2010 at 12:24 pm
nefariouslyme, Richland, Michigan
0 articles 0 photos 72 comments
I love the imagery in this. I feel like I really know what you mean with the way you're using all these words in strange ways; ways that they usually aren't used.

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on Oct. 11 2010 at 12:20 pm
Swordpen GOLD, Mattapoisett, Massachusetts
16 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody's perfect well there was this one guy but we killed him" -From "Lamb" by Christopher Moore

Nice title great poem one that you could just think about for hours on end

on Oct. 11 2010 at 10:08 am
bethy4916 BRONZE, Paonia, Colorado
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments
Sheer beauty. A perfect poem.

on Oct. 10 2010 at 5:56 pm
kmarie14 PLATINUM, Hyrum, Utah
22 articles 5 photos 246 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is either an adventure...or nothing" -Helen Keller

I love this. My favorite part is the last two or three lines :) a.maz.ing! :) please check out my work, I would love to hear ur opinion! Thanks for posting ;)

on Sep. 19 2010 at 9:29 pm
CammyLashay SILVER, Java, Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
Failure is not for me.

i Love!!! it

on Sep. 19 2010 at 7:43 am
thebushhippie PLATINUM, Sandown, New Hampshire
24 articles 0 photos 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
Leave behind your own footprints! :0)

LOVED IT! My favorite part is the last few lines, especially "so I just sit and wait for the tide to come in". Love it, love it, love it!!!!!

on Sep. 13 2010 at 4:57 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Wow, I like what I wrote the first time I read this better. :)

on Sep. 13 2010 at 4:56 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

I love this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Your imagery is great!

on Aug. 28 2010 at 11:10 pm
OstentatiousNature BRONZE, Laingsburg, Michigan
4 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Maybe our favorite quotations say more about us that than people or things we're quoting" -John Green

This is beautiful! Great, great job. Totally a favorite!

on Aug. 28 2010 at 10:10 pm
spoarder SILVER, Ankeny, Iowa
5 articles 0 photos 5 comments
I really liked this! Great job!

on Aug. 28 2010 at 8:50 pm
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which
procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt
i'm F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

wowthis is really good!!

 

*could you please check out and comment on my stuff?? thnx


on Aug. 28 2010 at 1:30 pm
DifferentTeen PLATINUM, Seaford, Delaware
32 articles 2 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There’s no such thing as true love, just spurts of insanity—falling over and over again, thinking that won’t happen to me"

Nice poem, I loved the way you ended it! Check out my poem "Freedom" or some others?

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on Aug. 20 2010 at 7:15 pm
reg93 BRONZE, Billings, Montana
2 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, and leaves before she is left."
— Marilyn Monroe

This is really good! You have some skills... (:

on Aug. 17 2010 at 12:32 pm
aquarius SILVER, Lancaster, Pennsylvania
5 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"unwelcome truths are not popular."

I must say, this was a mind-bender. I enjoyed it a whole dang lot, don't get me wrong. I thought it was...refreshing. That's the word. The continuity of the piece flowed all the way until the end, and then it seemed so complete. Really nice job. [: