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Sickness MAG

By Anonymous

You wreak black
like nightfall.
You words are
dark and sharp.
You spear hearts
to see them bleed.
You run wild
with the sun
which so willingly
burns you.
Your harsh words
have never echoed
so clear and sound
with the wind.
Your words dug
gashes in the moon
and light the sky.
Dark looms and
has never hesitated.
We wonder why



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on Sep. 10 2010 at 6:49 am
taintedannex GOLD, Hong Kong, Other
15 articles 5 photos 166 comments

Favorite Quote:
The truth is that at some point, everyone's going to hurt you. You just have to decide who's worth the pain.

Some say having something to lose is what makes you vulnerable. I believe that having something to lose only makes you stronger.

This is such a strong beautiful poem!

on Aug. 2 2010 at 12:41 pm
KirstynAlexandra PLATINUM, Baltimore, Maryland
24 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"I\'m selfish, impatient and a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control and at times hard to handle. But if you can\'t handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don\'t deserve me at my best.\"
— Marilyn Monroe

Imagination is more important than knowledge...
Albert Einstein

wow, amazing poem! plz check out my work. it would be highly appreciated! :)

on Jul. 28 2010 at 5:12 pm
silent_reader BRONZE, Columbia, Maryland
1 article 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I cannot live without books." - Thomas Jefferson

it left me speechless! amazing!

on Jul. 28 2010 at 12:27 pm
VickyLove92 PLATINUM, Green Bay, Wisconsin
41 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
once life gets harsh/hard, hold your head strong because that's all you can do

amazing, i love it....bravo:) you took great details in this. read sum of my work:) thankz

ejp04 SILVER said...
on Jul. 28 2010 at 2:40 am
ejp04 SILVER, Mesa, Arizona
6 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
We don't read and write poetry because it's cute.
We read and write poetry because we are members
of the human race. And the human race is filled with
passion. And medicine, law, business, engineering,
these are noble pursuits and necessary to sustain life.
But poetry, beauty, romance, love, these are what we
stay alive for. To quote from Whitman, "O me! O life!...
of the questions of these recurring; of the endless trains
of the faithless... of cities filled with the foolish; what good
amid these, O me, O life?" Answer. That you are here - that
life exists, and identity; that the powerful play goes on and
you may contribute a verse. That the powerful play *goes on*
and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?

-Dead Poets Society
1989

How about giving some constructive criticism if you don't like it, instead of saying it sucks?

on Jul. 6 2010 at 11:27 pm
LaurenRox BRONZE, Arvada, Colorado
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Always do right this will gratify some people and astonish the rest.... Mark Twain

wow that was really neat im normally not a fan of free verse but i really enjoyed your poem

on Jun. 14 2010 at 2:58 pm
softballbabe2014 SILVER, Wimberley, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Smile now, Cry later." "everything happens for a reason"

you have no right! umm.. Shut up! why are you on this site anyway?

on Jun. 14 2010 at 12:17 pm
vikesfan28 GOLD, Genoa, Nevada
14 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm still a geek on the inside, that's the important thing.









-Wierd Al Yankovic

hey Ummm...shutup?  why don't you ummm...SHUT UP???   this poem was very creative and instead of critizising it like tell the author how to make it better?

on Jun. 14 2010 at 11:38 am
thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
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Amazing!  I love this, in fact I'm going to rate it 5 of 5 and set it as one of my favorites!  The ONLY thing that I would change is maybe sepperating some sections it stanzas instead of having one connected stanza, but again, i love it!

on Jun. 14 2010 at 11:07 am
xoxochillin BRONZE, Suffolk, Virginia
4 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"Never regret something that once made you smile."

omg! this is like awesome :P

on Jun. 14 2010 at 9:46 am
the_quiet_one BRONZE, Orangevale, California
3 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I write for no other purpose than to add to the beauty that now belongs to me. I write a story for no other reason than to add three or four hundred acres to my magnificent estate.”
~Jack London (White Fang)

Um....did you actually read the rest of the poem, after that one mistake? It doesn't suck!

on May. 23 2010 at 11:36 am
You might want to change you to your in the 3rd line. Other than that, yes, it sucks.

on May. 23 2010 at 10:47 am
live.create16 GOLD, Dedham, Maine
11 articles 4 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Far away there in the sunshine are my highest aspirations. I may not reach them, but I can look up and see their beauty, believe in them, and try to follow where they lead.
- Louisa May Alcott.

this is beautiful :D

Sarbear GOLD said...
on May. 9 2010 at 12:49 pm
Sarbear GOLD, Milan, Ohio
10 articles 4 photos 489 comments

Favorite Quote:
--Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way, when you criticize them, you're a mile away from them and you have their shoes.
--When life gives you lemons, squirt them in people's eyes.

this is so deep. i admire your writing. this poem really made me think and this really has a good message. keep writing!!

check out some of my work?  thanks!


on May. 1 2010 at 12:19 pm
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
22 articles 0 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

very powerful. awesome. luvv it keep writingg

on May. 1 2010 at 11:00 am
Sileron-evol PLATINUM, Providence, Rhode Island
44 articles 0 photos 98 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we are captives of our own identities, living in prisons of our own creation"

Beautiful. & i love your word choices to this piece. please check out my work,its not that good but i would love to know what you think

on Apr. 9 2010 at 7:37 pm
LihuaEmily SILVER, North Kingstown, Rhode Island
7 articles 3 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is said that there's no such thing as a free lunch. But the universe is the ultimate free lunch." -Alan Guth

Fully and richly beautiful.

on Apr. 9 2010 at 6:06 pm
emo_nerd951 BRONZE, Clover, South Carolina
3 articles 5 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always be kind, for everyone is fighting a hard battle." -unknown

Oh my gosh that was good!!!

on Mar. 19 2010 at 3:15 am
SolvoAnimus BRONZE, Jamaica, New York
1 article 0 photos 29 comments
reminds me of death for some reason...

on Mar. 18 2010 at 10:37 pm
AliceStarling BRONZE, Butterfly, Idaho
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments
Very deep, Nice work!