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October 15, 2014
By haley101 DIAMOND, Windsor, Connecticut
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haley101 DIAMOND, Windsor, Connecticut
70 articles 5 photos 195 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Someone I loved once gave me a box full of darkness. It took me years to understand that this too, was a gift.”

― Mary Oliver

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the sky breaks white
with no churning darkness
and the stars are these meaningless
forms of white with no contrast:
all their light has caught up
to the passing of time.
as this sky falls away,
i wake to see a flash of your skin,
your shoulders, sleeves and fingers
brushing mine.
i open my eyes to the darkness
of my room,
blinking furiously.
i erase, with a harsh severity,
your face, and why i thought
the sky was so
broken.

© Bonnie K., San Antonio, TX

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TrishDestiny PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 18 2014 at 8:09 am
TrishDestiny PLATINUM, Jerantut , Pahang, Other
45 articles 2 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
“When it's over, I want to say: all my life
I was a bride married to amazement.
I was the bridegroom, taking the world into my arms.

When it is over, I don't want to wonder
if I have made of my life something particular, and real.
I don't want to find myself sighing and frightened,
or full of argument.

I don't want to end up simply having visited this world.”

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This is so lovely Haley. Your description and imageries were really wonderful. This piece belongs to mag.
haley101 DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 17 2014 at 2:09 pm
haley101 DIAMOND, Windsor, Connecticut
70 articles 5 photos 195 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Someone I loved once gave me a box full of darkness. It took me years to understand that this too, was a gift.”

― Mary Oliver

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thanks :) You might have seen it before because I've re-written it. Before I made these revisions the article wasn't an editor's pick. Thank you for your support! Very much appreciated. 
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 17 2014 at 11:02 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

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I know I've seen this before, and I told you what I thought about it, but this is just so good. It's amazing. You're an amazing and talented writer. Also, congrats on the editor's choice! You truly deserve it. :) Thank you so much, my friend! For sharing this. :)