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December 17, 2008
By AmbRawr BRONZE, Allentown, Pennsylvania
AmbRawr BRONZE, Allentown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
We choose the love we think we deserve ~The Perks


And I remember she wouldn’t wake up.
Her lips were mushed together in a
Horrible shade of red
They buried my mother in a white dress
And red lips.
And she couldn’t see.
Where are your glasses, Mommy?
And still at sixteen I bring them to my face
And peer through the distorted murky lenses
To see what she saw
Maybe one day …
And I remember it hitting me
Like it does every day
When I hear them all talk and complain about their
“Horrible” mothers
What’s it like to have a mother
I’d give anything to know,
Or at least for them to know how lucky they are.
They know.
And I remember she wouldn’t sit up
And I dreamed of a stuffing machine because
Someone whispered by my ear she was
Cut in half and stuffed
And it made no sense
And still at sixteen I wonder
What happened to my mother?
And I remember her faintly
She doesn’t even smile in my dreams anymore
And I wonder if she’ll ever be proud of me
If she’d ever approve of me
And who I’ve become
The things I’ve seen
The things I’ve done
And I remember her singing
Though I can’t hear her voice
The only happy Christmas I hold on to
Every year
Maybe one day it’ll come back
I used to think
Maybe one day she’d come back
And still at sixteen I hope
Maybe one day she’ll come back …
And I remember she wouldn’t wake up
Not even to say good-bye.



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on Jan. 28 2013 at 6:59 pm
thankfate SILVER, HELLO WISCONSIN!!!, Wisconsin
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i love this.

on Jan. 19 2013 at 2:26 am
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

ps. Please check out my work.... thanks  :D

on Jan. 19 2013 at 2:26 am
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

Wow this is very moving. A dear family member of mine died recently and I still keep imagining him waiting for me at his house asking to play cards....

nmk1128 SILVER said...
on Jan. 13 2013 at 3:52 pm
nmk1128 SILVER, Fort Myers, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"You don't write because you want to say something, you write because you have something to say." - F. Scott Fitzgerald

This is a very good representation of the human condition. It shows how we as humans hold on even when there is no realistic possibility of our wishes coming true, we still hold on, and there's magic in that. Please check out my poems and writings (: 

on Dec. 31 2012 at 3:28 pm
sadesdd DIAMOND, Elma, Iowa
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This poem is very touching, and I very much enjoyed reading it. I could feel the raw emotion: frustration, sadness, confusion. Thank you for writing this beautiful flowing poem.

on Dec. 23 2012 at 10:24 pm
Hannah24 SILVER, Redmond, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
“Those who bring sunshine to the lives of others cannot keep it from themselves.” – J.M. Barrie

this is so beautiful, it really flows well

alllllijah said...
on Dec. 18 2012 at 5:32 pm
wow you got that right wait what poem are you reading

on Dec. 18 2012 at 2:38 pm
blondie707 SILVER, Eureka, California
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Favorite Quote:
no boy is worth your tears and the one who is wont make you cry.

This is very beautiful.

on Nov. 8 2012 at 4:05 pm
flaflafla BRONZE, Ellisville, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"I have no favorite quotes"- FlaFlaFla

Very well written, but dark.... Good Job anyway :)

on Nov. 8 2012 at 4:01 pm
audreylouiseee BRONZE, Ellisville, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
:)

This is a really insprational poem. I feel bad for you. I can really feel you through this poem. It was a good and intriguing to read. I was written really well.

AddieB BRONZE said...
on Nov. 8 2012 at 3:30 pm
AddieB BRONZE, Ellisville, Missouri
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This is a good poem and really has feeling. I hope you keep writing more and get deeper.

on Nov. 8 2012 at 3:27 pm
ashley yarbrough BRONZE, Ballwin, Missouri
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That is so sad, I'm so sorry.

on Nov. 8 2012 at 9:26 am
colorguardgrl ELITE, Derry, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
“If I had a world of my own, everything would be nonsense. Nothing would be what it is, because everything would be what it isn't. And contrary wise, what is, it wouldn't be. And what it wouldn't be, it would. You see?” - Mad Hatter

Beautiful. Absolutitly beautiful.

on Nov. 8 2012 at 6:31 am
Licenseplatelove, Cary, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"No one can be uncheered with a balloon." ~A. A. Milne in Winnie the Pooh

This peom is full of emotion.  I can releate because I know a friend who lost her father, he was kind of like a second father to me as well.  But back to your poem. It has good rhythm and conveys deep emotion. It is a little repetitive, but to me that just enforces the story and meaning. 

on Oct. 23 2012 at 12:29 pm
radicalchickster DIAMOND, Jericho, New York
52 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never, ever, ever give up."

Personally, I think you're a great writer, but that it could defintely use more work.

Misfit95 said...
on Oct. 18 2012 at 6:34 pm
Misfit95, Dover, Ohio
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Sad but beautiful. Great work. :)

Something16 said...
on Oct. 17 2012 at 7:20 pm
The message was really great and I can relate to it. But it didnt spark any real emotion in me. But I did like it.

on Oct. 17 2012 at 12:21 pm
kaiterbug BRONZE, Goose Creek, South Carolina
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First of all I will start off by saying that your poem is ok. The meaning of your poem was clear and cohesive throughout and I applaud you for that. I will not sit here and tell you I know what you’re character is feeling because I don’t. I feel like you should have tried to evoke more empathy than sympathy. I think a poem is more effective when you use empathy (relating to people who feel the same as you do) than just simply having them give you sympathy (feel sorry for you). The fluidity wasn’t what it could have been. I personally didn’t like the repeating of “And still at sixteen I…” for me this repeating lost some of the serious ness of the poem because it’s trying to make people feel sympathy. They fluidity is also lost with some of the line breakage “Her lips were mushed together in a--Horrible shade of red--They buried my mother in a white dress--And red lips.--And she couldn’t see.” These lines just seems disconnected. “They know.--And I remember she wouldn’t sit up--And I dreamed of a stuffing machine because--Someone whispered by my ear she was--Cut in half and stuffed--And it made no sense” Your poem lost me here. Using your own words “it made no sense”.  It confused me and I was unsure of why it was used. I think you could omit this section and the poem would be completely fine on its own. Your use of figurative langue was a little lacking. You were straighter forward with what you meant. The imagery was much greater than frilly clichés. “…I bring them to my face--And peer through the distorted murky lenses…” I can really see this happening. All in all this poem was ok. With some editing I think it could be really great and effective in moving people more than it already does.

on Oct. 17 2012 at 12:20 pm
berenice uribe, Kansas City, Missouri
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I  really enjoyed your poem.It uses imagery and describes clearly how you feel at that point in time.

VivIzzy BRONZE said...
on Oct. 17 2012 at 10:06 am
VivIzzy BRONZE, Goose Creek, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
where words fail, music speaks.

i feeel like this peice is very realistic and very relatable because i lost my mom very young and it describes how i felt exactly so keep up the good work