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the day i swallowed the sun

May 26, 2018
By saltyranchers SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
saltyranchers SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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the day i finally caught the sun
between my lips
was the day i was set free
from the iron cage
with its iron bars,
that crushed my arms
and shattered my lungs.
i closed my eyes
and let the golden flames
drip down the back of my throat
and coat my tongue like honey.
i felt it spread through
my chest,
felt the thing i
had been chasing
for years
and years
and years.
i watched as the inky blackness
that had suffocated me
for so many silent nights
bled from my fingertips and
sunk into the dirt,
staining the daisies
and wilting the poppies.
a golden bead
slipped
down my cheek,
and i wondered
why my tears
had never tasted so
sweet.
sitting down with the sunflowers,
i watched the cotton candy
clouds
float across the baby blue sky,
and began writing about
the day i swallowed the sun.



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on Sep. 12 2018 at 10:50 am
rockstar_KK GOLD, Farmington, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm still figuring out who I am. But I know I'm not who I once was." -Brendon Urie, from Panic! At The Disco

Very descriptive. Well done.

on Sep. 8 2018 at 8:08 pm
ramblingwriter_7 GOLD, Dublin, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"I've realized now that our world doesn't define us, we define our world."

Beautiful! Great job.

on Aug. 24 2018 at 10:12 am
littlesun BRONZE, Plymouth, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
You're a hairy, wizard

this is soo beautiful omg

on Aug. 18 2018 at 2:53 am
Clary_Fray DIAMOND, Castro Valley, California
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Favorite Quote:
foolish consistency is the hobgoblin of the mind
-rwe

I like this a lot

on Aug. 10 2018 at 5:31 am
TeaOnPluto PLATINUM, Dublin, Other
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You have talent, this is really beautiful.

on Jul. 28 2018 at 5:12 am
Meghali Bari BRONZE, Indore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Be kind and keep courage

This poem is really wonderful .

on Jul. 25 2018 at 3:39 pm
Rhiannon_4 DIAMOND, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
If you chase two rabbits, you will lose them both.
- Native American proverb

Do not go gentle into that good night but rage, rage against the dying of the light.
- Dylan Thomas

What is past is past -- it is the present and the future that concern us.
- Hiawatha, founder of the Iroquois Confederacy

This poem is so beautiful I'm speechless. I love the style, keep up the good work!

on Jul. 21 2018 at 6:39 pm
--notte_stellata-- SILVER, San Jose, California
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Favorite Quote:
"If you cannot do it, practice until you can do it. If you can do it, then practice till you can do it perfectly. If you can do it perfectly, then practice until you can do it perfectly every time."
- Yuzuru Hanyu

It's beautiful, and I don't know... I think the word that represents it the best is 'Freedom'. Incredible Poem. Keep writing!

on Jun. 27 2018 at 3:47 pm
EyesofIris GOLD, South Burlington, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
"I've always loved the idea of not being what people expect me to be." -Anonymous

I love this poem, thank you for sharing!

on Jun. 22 2018 at 9:36 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

P.S.: I submitted a feedback post for you, and really hope your piece gets published!! Gah! I love it so much!!!!

on Jun. 22 2018 at 9:23 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
325 articles 10 photos 1165 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

This gave me the chills! So powerful, raw, and touching. I can feel the tone of the poem, a soft, ephemeral heart beat, seeping through my computer screen. This is an amazing piece, and I encourage you to continue writing enthralling poetry such as this!

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on Jun. 22 2018 at 3:16 am
karisuna GOLD, Pinellas Park, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"The flower that blooms in adversity is the most rare and beautiful of them all." -The Emperor, Mulan

"Let go of anger, let go of pride, when you are bound by nothing, you go beyond sorrow." -Buddha

The words flow so well. You’re an amazing writer!

on Jun. 11 2018 at 8:25 pm
LoveIsAllYouNeed BRONZE, Flemington, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Be groovy or leave , man.
~Bob Dylan

Beautiful writing style;) This is a great piece

on Jun. 11 2018 at 8:25 pm
LoveIsAllYouNeed BRONZE, Flemington, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Be groovy or leave , man.
~Bob Dylan

Beautiful writing style;) This is a great piece

on Jun. 7 2018 at 12:16 am
ElisaTheDuck ELITE, Rigaud, Other
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Favorite Quote:
LOOK AT MY PROFILE. DO IT.

Ah such literal release. Been a while since I last read a poem this beautiful and bare and free. Thank you for that. :)

on Jun. 5 2018 at 12:20 pm
Herine-The-Cat BRONZE, Waco, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"You can not change the past, but I daresay, you may learn something from it." ~Time

Congrats, you made me smile.

on Jun. 2 2018 at 5:44 pm
NotAikuChalmers,
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Thank you Sally! Very cool!!

on Jun. 2 2018 at 1:14 pm
saltyranchers SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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ugh i love u tHANK UUU

on Jun. 2 2018 at 1:12 pm
devonjss BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
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we love a talented queen !! this is so good

on Jun. 2 2018 at 12:44 pm
saltyranchers SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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ahhhh thank you so much