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The White Swan

January 11, 2012
By beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt


The water ripples
as it makes way for you, the
princess of the lake.



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on May. 26 2012 at 10:18 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Thanks for that!

on May. 25 2012 at 2:08 pm
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
33 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference.&quot;

I love the idea of nature making room for nature--the picture really went along with the poem's theme. Calm and mellow is why I like and you took that theme to a whole new level involving the beauties of nature

on Apr. 24 2012 at 11:50 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Thank you!

on Apr. 24 2012 at 11:49 am
dragonfly95 SILVER, Argaon, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
&#039;&#039; there is nothing to fear but fear its self&#039;&#039;

this i love! three lines that read like more, i adore :) :o

on Apr. 8 2012 at 6:19 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Thank you~ I was trying to relate to the story behind the white swan.

butterfly123 said...
on Apr. 8 2012 at 1:55 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey! this is so peaceful and elegant . i love the way you have called the swan as the princess of the lake. great work  and keep writing! XD

on Mar. 20 2012 at 7:48 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Thanks a lot~

on Mar. 20 2012 at 7:46 am
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I live for the nights I can&#039;t remember with the people I will never forget.&quot; -Carassisa M-&lt;3<br /> <br /> &quot;What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve.&quot; -Softball Coach Steve B-

This is incredible. Really beautiful.

on Mar. 17 2012 at 5:44 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Cool thanks for commenting~

NickyJ BRONZE said...
on Mar. 17 2012 at 2:31 pm
NickyJ BRONZE, Hyde Park, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;In three words I can sum up everything I&#039;ve learned about life: it goes on.&rdquo; ~Robert Frost

*But* this is pretty good.

Sorry, typo lol


NickyJ BRONZE said...
on Mar. 17 2012 at 2:28 pm
NickyJ BRONZE, Hyde Park, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;In three words I can sum up everything I&#039;ve learned about life: it goes on.&rdquo; ~Robert Frost

It's a very subtle, and very peaceful. "The water ripples" is so simple but it works so well.

I've never been quite fond of Haiku, this is pretty good.


on Feb. 24 2012 at 5:15 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Thanks for commenting~

on Feb. 23 2012 at 10:49 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;if you&#039;re not 1st you&#039;re last&quot;

it's simply beautiful and so much elegance packed in such a short poem :) great job

on Feb. 18 2012 at 10:19 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Thank you for your comment~

on Feb. 18 2012 at 10:14 am
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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Short but powerful. Great job. And the picture suits it perfectly! Keep writing!

on Feb. 4 2012 at 5:11 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Thanks so much!

on Feb. 4 2012 at 1:53 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;I&#039;d rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I&#039;d rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye&#039;s a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example&#039;s always clear.&rdquo; -Edgar Guest

very good, very elegant! Great job!

on Jan. 29 2012 at 4:23 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Thank you again for your comment~

on Jan. 20 2012 at 11:30 am
snaomi PLATINUM, Cheshire, Connecticut
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I think that's a potential with most haikus, but the reference makes it a little more edgy - maybe the only thing I would think about is the word "ripples". There may be a slightly more unique way to describe the movement of the water. I don't think it's a huge deal though. I like it a lot.

on Jan. 20 2012 at 11:21 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

I'm worried that some readers will think it is too cheesy. Do you think so?