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God, Can You Hear Me?

September 18, 2009
By ElizabethW. DIAMOND, Oconto, Wisconsin
ElizabethW. DIAMOND, Oconto, Wisconsin
72 articles 2 photos 28 comments

I try to talk to you
But it's like you're not there
My words fade away
Into empty air

Can you hear me?
Can my prayer reach that far?
Do you hear one child's cry
Wherever you are?
I'm just one small voice
In a world of pain
And I'm not sure
So I'll ask again
Can you hear me?

I try to hear your voice
But you seem so far away
I know you're calling me
But I don't know what you're saying
I can't hear you

I can't hear you
I'm drowning in my sin
I try to reach for you
But I'm falling down again
One still, small voice
In a world of pain
If I try hard enough
I know I can
I can hear you

Rolling like thunder
In my once dead heart
I can hear you speaking
We were never apart
I can hear you

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This article has 56 comments.

on Feb. 10 2010 at 8:39 am
crazy.N.love BRONZE, Fairbury, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone." -Audrey Hepburn

This was truely inspiring. You have a new and different way of saying what some spend their whole lives trying to describe. Use what you've got! I loved this.

on Feb. 10 2010 at 12:17 am
asian7art SILVER, Basalt, Colorado
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This song is truly amazing:)

Kallz said...
on Jan. 19 2010 at 5:39 pm
Your awesome. The song sounds familiar. But what does that have to do with how good this song is? INCREDIBLE! Absolutely, positively PERRRR-FECT. COOL , AMAZING, there's soooo many words that could describe this piece! The one's I listed are some but if I list all the words this comment could end up being 10 or 15 pages long! Anyway, like I said...

400king BRONZE said...
on Dec. 28 2009 at 11:14 am
400king BRONZE, Hemet, California
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Favorite Quote:
a poem is never finished, just abandoned

this is a truly awesome song, but i don't really like after the line "but i don't know what you're saying" the "i can't hear you after" i think you could possibly lose. just a better flow.

on Dec. 12 2009 at 6:41 am
RaeOfSunshine! BRONZE, Arusha, Other
1 article 2 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be who you are and say what you feel because the people who mind don't matter and the people who matter, don't mind. - Dr. Seuss

Wowww. This is truly amazing. You put words to my feelings exactly. Keep writing! You're a *great* writer.

on Dec. 7 2009 at 8:34 pm
ElizabethW. DIAMOND, Oconto, Wisconsin
72 articles 2 photos 28 comments
You have no idea how happy this makes me! Thank you for telling me. I feel like I've accomplished something with this poem now!

on Dec. 6 2009 at 10:01 pm
luna12709 SILVER, Missouri, Texas
7 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Dreams can be reached no matter how high they are as long as you never give up on them." (My mom)

this peice was so baeutiful and i am in love with in godd job its great

on Dec. 6 2009 at 12:40 pm
I fell in love this piece! I have had similar experiences in my life that caused me to run from God and even not be able to hear him whispering in my ear. But i assure you, he is ALWAYS there! Always speaking to you, especially through his Word. I've found that when i can't hear him, the best thing to do is to sit, talk with (not to) with Him and to read the Bible. Overall, great job! :)

Bethani GOLD said...
on Dec. 6 2009 at 10:33 am
Bethani GOLD, Highlands Ranch, Colorado
10 articles 0 photos 508 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is perfect until you sit back and realize how boring it is without risks.

I needed to hear this. I've been making bad choices lately and I haven't even realized I need to talk to God to get forgiveness from them. Thank you so much for writing this! It's a powerful and touching song!

Lanae BRONZE said...
on Nov. 14 2009 at 9:47 am
Lanae BRONZE, Milford, Indiana
2 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"'For I know the plans I have for you,' Declares the LORD, 'Plans to prosper you and not to harm you. Plans to give you a hope and a future.'" Jeremiah 29:11

Awesome work! very relatable. keep it up! =)

on Sep. 28 2009 at 3:59 pm
Kendra92 SILVER, The Colony, Texas
6 articles 0 photos 10 comments
This is beautiful and touching. I could feel the mood of these lyrics. Keep writing. You are truly talented :]

on Sep. 28 2009 at 11:49 am
michaela BRONZE, Green Cove Springs, Florida
2 articles 0 photos 15 comments
This is a beautiful song. I wrote a similar poem once when I was in a bad stage in my life and felt far from God. I felt that way because I was in sin, and sin is what seperates us from God, because God cannot look on sin. (Psalm 66:18) But he does answer us when we repent of our wrong doing, because He loves us so much! (John 3:16) I hope this is encouraging.

Again, beautiful song. You are a talented writer.

5 out of 5 star rating.


on Sep. 27 2009 at 9:13 pm
LikeToPlayFish GOLD, Omaha, Nebraska
13 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We all fake smiles, just the ones who are true to themselves seem sad."-Niq.

I like it and ya know what i liked more was that as i was reading it i could imagine someone singing it (like i could feel the beat and rhythm in the back)

on Sep. 26 2009 at 5:56 pm
ultrabookworm BRONZE, Equestria, Kentucky
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I really love this. I think I'll have to tag this as one of my favorites. ;-)

Silver12 said...
on Sep. 26 2009 at 4:17 pm
Silver12, Atlanta, Georgia
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments
I love it! A lot of experience what your poem describes and it flows perfectly!

Jaquie BRONZE said...
on Sep. 26 2009 at 1:08 pm
Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
3 articles 0 photos 407 comments

Favorite Quote:
This is certainly one of my favorites: "I will become even more undignified than this, and I will be humiliated in my own eyes." -2 Samuel 6:22

Wow this is really touching. Great work! Keep writing.

God bless,