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Under the Same Moon
I can hear the hum
I can feel your veins
Reaching out just to catch your pain
I used to know how to dream
now life flows on, like an endless stream
Melancholy goodbyes
Your tears are just another drop into the sea
Sometimes it's hard to believe you breath the same air as me
So watch the moon-fall on your silent balcony
And I'll gaze too,
If I can blank out the city streets
The same stars above,
day after day
seem different now, as I see your face
I'll cover your fears with my flushed cheek bones
as you kiss me
between the ears
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wow. i just added this to my favorites because this is such a GREAT poem!! first of all, the title is amazing. the poem flows so nicely and there are so many good lines!!
"I used to know how to dream
now life flows on, like an endless stream
Melancholy goodbyes"
^some of my favorite lines!!
GREAT JOB! i hope this gets published
Honestly I think the only things that might need tweaking are the stanza's beginning with "So watch..." and "The same stars..."
What I love about the first few stanzas are their physical connotation ("hum...veins" "tears...breathe same air..."). They are what make the poem so raw and emotional. The last stanza is only further proof of that as well. But those middle sets of lines have a sense of detachment, and don't seem to pack quite as much of a punch.
Of course, you could by going for variety, which is great for songwriting. :)
Great lyrics, keep it up! :)
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