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A Light Among Eager Darkness

October 9, 2013
By Calliashi SILVER, Litchfield Park, Arizona
Calliashi SILVER, Litchfield Park, Arizona
6 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
The man with the key is king and honey, you should see me in a crown. ~James Moriarty

In a deep wood owned by this one large town
Buried out of sight is a lonely cave
Stone once black, now smeared with mud till it’s brown
The inside so dark, not a soul to save
Its rock is abused and drawn all over
And only a few trees for protection
The branches, thin and weak, barely cover
The cave sits without any affection
Then came two wanderers, a boy and girl
She was stomping all about and shouting
He was solemn yet bright just like a pearl
Then they found the cave while on their outing
“Let us go in!” the girl cried eagerly
Reluctantly, the boy agreed meagerly

Inside they walk and find to their surprise
A fiery flame so full of warmth, so fierce
It took a time for him to realize
The dark reaching out to the fire, to pierce
They’re startled to find the light of the fire
Drains their faces of color, and the eyes too
Till race and age are tales from a liar
And ghosts of their forms remain as a clue
Now garbage and rubbish littered the ground
From past guests who dumped out all their troubles
Crunching under foot, louder with each sound
That amplified so loud like it doubled
There was also old moss and burnt up wood
But why it was there was misunderstood

As the fire shimmered and danced with delight
Shadows flashed and they danced all ‘cross the wall
They were fearsome figures that forced a fright
But vanished before it made their skin crawl
The girl grew weary of there in the grotto
She’d start insulting how unclean it was
“Always be perfect” she’d quote her motto
And then toss around trash just because
The girl stalked off, eager to get away
The boy turned when his ears caught a whisper
Like the cave was begging for him to stay
He left, ignoring as they grew crisper
As they left the fire died to a flicker
And the winds cried as the dark grew thicker

The author's comments:
This is a collection of three different sonnets to create one poem. It describes my feelings towards those left behind in school or really any social setting.

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This article has 9 comments.

Tizzy BRONZE said...
on Nov. 24 2013 at 5:10 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

It's so great and breathtaking...It's just amazing. Simply amazing. And Tanaz, don't say "literally"  I was right beside you...but all the more, it's just...wow....just...awesome...simply great...

Tamy24 said...
on Oct. 30 2013 at 8:27 pm
Tamy24, Brooklyn, New York
0 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Be daring, be different, be impractical, be anything that will assert integrity of purpose and imaginative vision against the play-it-safers, the creatures of the commonplace, the slaves of the ordinary." Cecil Beaton- note to self

That is a very beautiful and inspiring poem. Well done!

on Oct. 23 2013 at 10:56 pm
BreakAwayFromMe, Big Island, Other
0 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm scared to get close and I hate being alone.
I long for that feeling to not feel at all.
The higher I get, the lower I'll sink.
I can't drown my demons, they know how to swim." --"Can you Feel My Heart" BMTH

Lovely :) I really like the last two lines as well :D

Zolenz DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 22 2013 at 5:00 pm
Zolenz DIAMOND, Musquodoboit Harbour, NS, Other
65 articles 0 photos 173 comments

Favorite Quote:
The pain that have cost us, the evils which have never happened.
- Thomas Jefferson

i love the last 2 lines. amazing ending.

on Oct. 22 2013 at 3:38 pm
The_Capricornian GOLD, Marietta, Georgia
12 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is nothing to writing. All you do is sit down at a typewriter and bleed. - Ernest Hemingway

Very good. I especially liked how you ended it; leaving the reader with a very strong impression.

on Oct. 21 2013 at 7:17 pm
Aramis_999 PLATINUM, Matthews, North Carolina
25 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be strong, believe in freedom and in God, love yourself, understand your sexuality, have a sense of humor, don’t judge people by their religion, color or sexual habits, love life and your family. -Madonna

That was amazing. The imagry and message, and all in a structured poem as well. 5 stars!

on Oct. 21 2013 at 3:07 am
TanazMasaba GOLD, Dhaka, Other
16 articles 10 photos 214 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You've gotta dance like there's nobody watching,
Love like you'll never be hurt,
Sing like there's nobody listening,
And live like it's Heaven on Earth."

---William W. Purkey

Wow. You're amazing. This poem literally brought me to tears!

on Oct. 19 2013 at 10:16 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 433 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

Your great in imagery and the idea. The first you did i didn't really like it but the poem below was by far my fav. :3

RKing BRONZE said...
on Oct. 17 2013 at 8:05 pm
RKing BRONZE, Abergavenny, Other
4 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Death is not a lover.
Oh yes he is." - The Road

You got real skill with imagery, I'll give you that now! Seriously, I enjoyed the imagery in these poems, the cave, the ruins, everything! I can't think of many negative things apart from the fact I personally enjoyed the first one the least, but that's all personal taste really :)