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A Fight for Survival

September 9, 2009
By Andrew Kranker SILVER, Bozeman, Montana
Andrew Kranker SILVER, Bozeman, Montana
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What was to begin a perfect day of bluebird skies, face shots, and soft landings would later turn to a fight for survival for one unfortunate pair who were planning a line down a steep and treacherous area in the non-patrolled Slushman’s backcountry. A quick ascent to the ridge top then an undemanding climb across left the pair standing on top of a ten foot cornice; nothing more than a quick leap, then they were on their way making first tracks. It was a perfect opener to their run, and before they knew it, they were faced with their first main obstacle which was a narrow chute that would require a small turn, a quick and sudden rush of air, and a jolting stop before a cliff. The first happily jumped in front, and quickly made his stop at the bottom with ease, as did the second. Boldly they faced their second assault, a dizzy drop down a thirty five foot cliff into a pillow of deep powder, opening into a steep but open meadow. This time the other skier made a first move, pulled a front flip, slightly over rotated and face planted into the snow completely buried, while the next skier just made the drop. The first jumper had lost both his skis while the other had made his way down a way from him waiting. In an attempt to put on his skis and hopefully enjoy the rest of the run, the recently buried individual made a sudden move which triggered an avalanche. Helplessly the lower skier was overtaken by the slabs, and in an instant, disappeared from sight while his partner stood helplessly at the top. As quickly as it had occurred, the surviving person grasped for his rescue beacon in awe at what had just occurred, and immediately began a life or death search for his fallen partner. What he did not realize was that at the very bottom of the ski hill when the pair was rushed with excitement for the epic day that lay before them, they had forgotten a routine check necessary for survival in a bad situation which was to test the life of their safety beacons. So after an hour of desperate search, struggle, anguish, and despair, the pair left the ski hill together, and rode back in silence. Neither spoke, but then again, one was dead.

The author's comments:
An asignment in my english class who's criteria was to write a short (12 sentance) creative story, even though this version is 13 sentances.

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This article has 7 comments.

on Nov. 29 2023 at 11:25 am
justarandomguy, Florida, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
don't let people define you, only you can.

You did a great job writing this story

kellyd said...
on Oct. 28 2009 at 4:45 pm
This story was full of action! I liked the way you created the setting in the mountains. The picture really helps me visualize the scene. The ending was disappointing that one of the pair ended up dying. I didn't understand that this happened till the last line, " Neither spoke, but then again, one was dead." I was a clever but depressing ending. I also enjoyed how you said " Helplessly the lower skier was over taken by the slabs, and in an instant, disappeared from sight while his partner stood helplessly at the top." I can really visualize that happening. Overall, it was a very clever action filled piece. Nice job!

mcbridet said...
on Oct. 8 2009 at 7:41 pm
I really liked this piece. First though, you should have stated that they were skiing instead of not giving any information that they were. Other than that, I liked how you gave description in how the accident happened. I also liked how you said, "neither spoke, but then again, one was dead" since you said how his partner was dead in a different way. Overall, it was a good piece.

on Oct. 2 2009 at 9:31 pm
Andrew Kranker SILVER, Bozeman, Montana
5 articles 0 photos 2 comments
Sketch... Who is this??

billcosbey said...
on Oct. 1 2009 at 8:04 pm
bill cosbey

awsomeness said...
on Oct. 1 2009 at 6:58 pm
i kno who you are :)

blawasb said...
on Sep. 25 2009 at 4:18 pm
This enlightening story about survival is very superior. I like survival stories is so this is a treat. I would recommend it to any one! Great Job!