Intensity | Teen Ink


June 13, 2009
By Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

The tears poured off her eyelids; slid down her cheeks; fell to the floor. Slowly she sank to the ground, trembling slightly. Her breath came in deep sobs, wracking her chest. She barely had enough air. She did not hear the soft footfalls coming ever closer. She did not see him as he sat down next to her. She did, however, feel as his arm wrapped around her shoulders. Turning slightly, the girl buried her face in his shoulder. Her friend held her tighter, resting his head in her soft chestnut curls.

The two of them sat that way for what felt like hours; the girl sobbing loudly on the boy’s shoulder, the boy holding her quietly, steadfastly. Finally, the girl released her last tear. She looked up at the boy, eyes red from crying, cheeks flushed. He turned to her, a small crooked smile on his lips. To the girl’s surprise, tears were slipping down his face as well. “Why are you crying?” she asked softly, voice cracking. The boy considered the question for a second.

“I am crying because you are crying,” he replied truthfully as yet another tear trickled down his handsome face. His smile was still there, unwavering.

The girl stared at him with wide eyes. He stared back at her. A chill like an electric current flowed through both of them. The air around them tingled with static. Slowly, as if pulled by some invisible force, the two teenagers moved closer. Their faces were within a hair’s breath of each other’s. “Why me?” she whispered. “Why did you choose me?” Her eyes darted back and forth, looking for an answer written on his face. “You are the only one who’s real. The only one out of all those girls who knows what it means to truly love someone. Even though he broke your heart, you just keep going. I like that. I think… I think I may even love that.”

His eyes gleamed with a passion long suppressed. “I think I may love you.” His sweet breath lingered on her lips. The girl’s heart began to beat frantically, as if trying to keep up with her rapidly changing emotions. “I think I may love you too,” she admitted.

Without meaning to, the girl shut her eyes. The two leaned even closer, closing the gap between them. His soft lips pressed against hers. She wrapped her arms around his neck, and his arms coiled around her waist. The kiss deepened.

Gently, they pulled apart. Both were smiling softly. “Thank you,” the girl said under her breath, so quiet that the boy sitting right next to her wasn’t sure he had heard her at first.

“For what?” She stared deeply into his eyes. He held her gaze, reciprocating the intensity. “For giving me a reason to live again. For saving me from falling.”

“Anytime. Thank you, too. Thanks for letting me in. Thanks for not pushing me away.”

At the same time, the two teenagers said, “I love you,” sealing their fate.

The two leaned in closer, their foreheads, then lips, pressing against the other’s.

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This article has 377 comments.

on Feb. 1 2010 at 12:04 pm
This was great!!! I loved how you potraid the characters.

dagrgvdv said...
on Feb. 1 2010 at 10:18 am
This is a great peice keep writing

faith said...
on Jan. 20 2010 at 5:03 pm
lindsey that was soo goodd! you are an awesome writer

on Jan. 20 2010 at 3:10 pm
I spelt great wrong

on Jan. 20 2010 at 2:42 pm
Lindseyy! This was gray you should show it to mrs. L

on Jan. 10 2010 at 6:36 pm
Samantha Feinauer, Freeland, Michigan
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment
WOW!! You are an AMAZING writer!! If you ever right a book, tell me, so I can buy it!!

mcw_816 SILVER said...
on Jan. 10 2010 at 4:52 pm
mcw_816 SILVER, Short Hills, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 26 comments
This gave me the chills.

on Jan. 10 2010 at 11:40 am
Taylor123 SILVER, Vassar, Michigan
6 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
everything happens for a reason

wow that was really great even with just a couple of pagraphs just imagine what you can do with a couple chapers.... if you ever write a book let me know and ill buy it :)

on Jan. 5 2010 at 7:36 pm
natygrace1217 PLATINUM, Jefferson, Maryland
24 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
trying is failing, doing is succeeding.

is there anything cuter than this? seriously that was absolutely adorable! i like how there was no setting, no names, no focus on the characters. it was just their romance. thats it. truly amazing!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Dec. 27 2009 at 1:19 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

I would like to thank everyone for reading, rating, and commenting on this! It means so much! Thank you! :D

juicypink said...
on Dec. 19 2009 at 9:42 pm
i love the intimacy- you're gonna go far!

on Dec. 19 2009 at 9:10 pm
biggerinfinities SILVER, Superior, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 356 comments

Favorite Quote:
“We accept the love we think we deserve.”
― Stephen Chbosky, The Perks of Being a Wallflower

I love it~ is there anything more sweet than this? i love that he was her friend first~ after all, the best love starts with friendship

on Dec. 19 2009 at 3:12 pm
SpiceyRedPepper GOLD, League City, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Im not clumsy im just allergic to gravity!!!!

awwww i want a love like that ur writing is so affective im jealous of that girl now LOL! luved it (if u cant tell):)

on Dec. 12 2009 at 7:48 pm
bubbasamantha GOLD, Woodville, Ohio
12 articles 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
Most dreams don't come true on their own; you have to make them true.  It takes a lot of work.  It's not easy, but not impossible, either.

Wow, you can totally tell that this boy really cares for this girl's feelings when he starts crying because her boyfriend broke her heart. He's hurt when she's hurt, and I find that the most romantic thing ever! Absolutely beautiful, and any girl's dream guy!

on Dec. 7 2009 at 10:19 pm
SerenityMine BRONZE, Not Saying, California
2 articles 0 photos 156 comments
Never mind. I just saw the part where you said it was her friend again. Ok, that is possible. lol. I thought he had just met her that day.

on Dec. 7 2009 at 10:18 pm
SerenityMine BRONZE, Not Saying, California
2 articles 0 photos 156 comments
This is a really great story although I don't think people can really fall in love in one day. I think that true love takes time to develop. But I still love love loved the story. Great job! :)

on Nov. 27 2009 at 9:50 pm
writergirl22 SILVER, In, New York
6 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never frown. You never know who's falling in love with your smile." -Anounymous

i really like it!

soo good

it gave me chills :)

StarsMoon said...
on Nov. 27 2009 at 7:39 pm
StarsMoon, Lehi, Utah
0 articles 0 photos 49 comments

that was really good!

i love it because it shows u that sometimes u can get hurt, but that when u fall in love, really fall in love, it wont matter. :)

really cute and inspiring! :)

on Nov. 27 2009 at 9:36 am
xxxVanessaxxx SILVER, Alexander, Arkansas
9 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"i CaNt Be AwAy fRoM hEr BeLlA, iT hUrTs ToO mUcH." (Jacob from the breaking dawn book)

oh my god. i want to fall like that. not that itll ever happen to me. but i can dream right????

on Nov. 5 2009 at 6:09 pm
jenx0x3 DIAMOND, Swampscott, Massachusetts
68 articles 0 photos 90 comments
This story makes me think of myself and my best friend who I am currenlty in LOVE with altho your story is my fantasy.....