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The Moment I Knew It Was Over MAG

May 1, 2015
By SophieFloph PLATINUM, Seattle, Washington
SophieFloph PLATINUM, Seattle, Washington
21 articles 3 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Her stomach did a revengeful flop."


I can remember there being sun – enough to cast long shadows on the cement. The sky was a crisp, clear blue, contrasting beautifully with the circling crows, searching for discarded scraps of food.

Like the crows, I circled. Around and around, then under the play structures, just in case. The people I ate lunch with liked to hang out on the play structures. I knew I was welcome to join them, if I asked.

I just hoped they’d ask.

I just hoped they’d notice me.

They didn’t notice.

There were shrieks of laughter, cries of joy – friends, happiness.

But I didn’t get that.

I was alone.

And that’s when I knew it was over …

And that I had to start again.


The author's comments:

I'm not sure how to categorize this piece. It could be poetry but it decided not to be, so I put it in "Personal Experience", though I don't think it quite fits there.


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on May. 8 2015 at 12:41 am
RosieRivtr PLATINUM, Fountain Hills, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Be the change you want to see in the world&quot;<br /> ------Ghandi

Great job @SophieSchnitzel! Congratulations on the award! This piece is really beautifully written, and I love the way that you are making yourself vulnerable in this. Anyone can relate to this piece. You are such a great writer!