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The Book of All Sins
October 16, 2012
Summary:
Ben Williams is a christian artifact researcher that gets this journal from Jesus. While he looks at it, there are no words in it. So now he has to find out why. While trying to solve this mystery, there are three devils that are after it. But why are they?
E.T.Wotruba
The Book of All Sins
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This book has 7 comments.
PandaBearLouise16 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 4 2012 at 2:52 pm
WOOOOOOOOOOOWWWW!!! i loved it!
AloneandFree SILVER said...
on Nov. 4 2012 at 1:20 pm
it was very good and inspiring
Snowflakes SILVER said...
on Oct. 25 2012 at 7:31 pm
Hey :) So I think this is a pretty damn amazing piece of writing. It is really creative, and as the comment says bellow, completely orignial. I have never read a storyline close to this, so congrats on that ! However, it can be a bit hard to read because your sentences sometimes get a little jumbled, the grammar can be quite poor and you repeat a lot of words. The amount of times I saw the word 'then' was unbelievable haha!
I also think you should comment more on the surrounding such as the settings/characters. Personally, when I read stuff I like to have full detail on what everything looks like to make it more well...real.
So yeah, I think you should read through it, correct any mistakes made, try not to repeat words so much and use more desrcription and this would be a book that I would happily buy :D
Sorry, this is a bit of an essay but I promised feedback so you got it hehe :)
I also think you should comment more on the surrounding such as the settings/characters. Personally, when I read stuff I like to have full detail on what everything looks like to make it more well...real.
So yeah, I think you should read through it, correct any mistakes made, try not to repeat words so much and use more desrcription and this would be a book that I would happily buy :D
Sorry, this is a bit of an essay but I promised feedback so you got it hehe :)
LestyPatrick PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 24 2012 at 6:42 pm
Totally original and I LOVE this!!
LinkinPark12 PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 21 2012 at 4:50 am
Hey E.T.Wotruba! As promised, I've read it :) This is a really good plot line and depending on how far you want to develop it, it could be exceptational! :) However, there are a few things you need to work on: -Overuse of the word "said" and "?" -There are loads of connectives; try to get rid of most of them, they take away tension, especially in death scenes. -Part 1 especially is quite informal; using phrases like "funny that". I'm not sure if this is what you want or not. -Think about the reactions for each character - especially to the death scenes. How would they react? Calm and controlled or upset? -Try to describe the appearance and setting in more detail - use the 5 senses and a range of vocabulary (theasauruses are good here!). -The ending is satisfying, but extend it slightly - especially the fight scene. Try to include short sentences to increase the tension. -As it is a short novel, there are some grammar (and spelling - but I'm not sure if that's because I'm from England - Americans and English spell certain words differently) issues, but nothing major. You might think I'm being quite negative, but I'm just trying to make this a really good novel, something for you to be proud of :) I see real potential here! I love love LOVE the plot line, and Warren and Dave's characters are amazing!! Maybe you could develop them more? The friendship between Ben and Tom is good, and I like the relationship of Ben and Jenny. Good ending - but what do they do with Jesus' journal? On the whole - a good novel, with some real potential. The storyline is captivating and inventive. Well done, thanks for the great read! :)
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