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Used To Be

July 27, 2009
By unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
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unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
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"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham

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Empty shells that at a time were eyes
I am concealed behind a complex, fabricated disguise

Skin that’s ashen and dry as sand
All signs of possible awareness have been shut out and banned

Running my gaunt fingers across the dusty recesses of my mind
Reminisces have left me hollow, frozen, and emotionally blind

Anguish

Burning

Frustration

Yearning for some kind of

Personal identification

Broken, but are the shattered pieces still hidden somewhere deep inside?
I suppose I shall be the one who has to eventually decide

Yet for now, you are granted the old of the ancient key
To the girl who once used to be me

© Jaleh A., West Jordan, UT

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The first line just floated into my head, and I figured out the rest.
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unearthlyhaphazard GOLD said...
on Aug. 17 2009 at 7:53 pm
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
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"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham

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Thank you so much, dreamer_believer! I'll definitely check out some of your work, as well.
jennee21_ann GOLD said...
on Aug. 16 2009 at 5:55 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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&quot;Don&#039;t gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold.&quot; <br /> <br /> &quot;You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer.&quot;

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wow! it's so sad, and i can relate to everything. the flow is great. it has great description. its a very original, true and creative poem. one of the best :) 5 stars! check out some of my work and comment, i love the feedback. and keep writing!! :)
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD said...
on Aug. 10 2009 at 6:32 pm
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
15 articles 0 photos 176 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.&quot;~W. Somerset Maugham

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Thanks, PK4evr and Zero_Kiryu! Identity crisis . . . that's a great description.
PK4evr ELITE said...
on Aug. 9 2009 at 9:16 pm
PK4evr ELITE, Allen, Texas
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When life gives you lemons, make grape juice, then watch everyone wonder how you did it!

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Wow, nice style! I like it :)
Zero_K DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 9 2009 at 8:47 pm
Zero_K DIAMOND, Moosic, Pennsylvania
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&quot;Life&#039;s no fun if you&#039;re not insane, otherwise you grow up to be an accountant.&quot; -Moi

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This is a beautiful poem about an identity crisis. I love this, 5 stars.

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