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Intertwined

March 10, 2012
By Anonymous

I need to feel a heartbeat I need to know that someone is really there that someone really cares about me I need to know you love me and that I make u complete and for you to be willing to compete for me at any givin cost I'd love to feel some safety in the midst of ur arms wen I'm crying for no reason for you to sit and listen hard and when the other girls start acting up and having to much fun you'll tell them all to go cause I'm the only one I'm special confidential I'm you're other missing half you're my best friend my possession an the one to make me laugh we love each other so you can even read my mind were ment to be together forever intertwined


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on Mar. 18 2012 at 11:50 am
Missy1999 SILVER, Windermere, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
John 3:16

:) thank you. Thats very nice of you to say. You're work is beautiful also:)

on Mar. 17 2012 at 2:35 pm
3mo_sw33ts SILVER, Gonzales, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but risk must be taken, because the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing at all."

No prob:D Im sure they will be amazing!

on Mar. 17 2012 at 10:59 am
Missy1999 SILVER, Windermere, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
John 3:16

Oh that's would be so great:) thanks!

on Mar. 16 2012 at 7:06 pm
3mo_sw33ts SILVER, Gonzales, Louisiana
9 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but risk must be taken, because the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing at all."

No I havent...but I will check it out!! :D

on Mar. 16 2012 at 1:05 pm
Missy1999 SILVER, Windermere, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
John 3:16

It's cool I know u didn't I should have include punctuation in it tho. Have u seen any of my other work? Did u like it?

on Mar. 12 2012 at 4:38 pm
3mo_sw33ts SILVER, Gonzales, Louisiana
9 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but risk must be taken, because the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing at all."

Oh its completly ok! I didnt mean to be mean!

on Mar. 11 2012 at 11:40 pm
Missy1999 SILVER, Windermere, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
John 3:16

I'm sorry I know:P I don't know what was on my mind when I was typing...probably something of some importance. I'll definitely work on double checking my work thought, thanks for the helpful critique!:)

on Mar. 11 2012 at 11:22 pm
3mo_sw33ts SILVER, Gonzales, Louisiana
9 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but risk must be taken, because the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing at all."

Its called stanzas, periods, commas, and spelling school:)

on Mar. 11 2012 at 7:27 pm
lookingformargo SILVER, Ithaca, New York
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Favorite Quote:
A child said, "What is the grass?" fetching it to me with full hands; How could I answer the child? I do not know what it is any more than he. I guess it must be the flag of my disposition, out of hopeful green stuff woven... and now it seems to me the beautiful uncut hair of graves. -Walt Whitman, Leaves Of Grass


We need never be hopeless, because we can never be irreparably broken. We think that we are invincible because we are. We cannot be born, and we cannot die. Like all energy, we can only change shapes and sizes and manifestations. They forget that when they get old. They get scared of losing and falling. But that part of us greater than the sum of our parts cannot begin and cannot end, and so it cannot fail. -Looking For Alaska

Here's what's not beautiful about it: from here, you can't see the rust or the cracked paint or whatever, but you can tell what the place really is. You see how fake it all is. It's not even hard enough to be made out of plastic. It's a paper town. I mean look at it, Q: look at all those cul-de-sacs, those streets that turn in on themselves, all the houses that were built to fall apart. All those paper people living in their paper houses, burning the future to stay warm. All the paper kids drinking beer some bum bought for them at the paper convenience store. Everyone demented with the mania of owning things. All the things paper-thin and paper-frail. And all the people, too. I've lived here for eighteen years and I have never once in my life come across anyone who cares about anything that matters. -Paper Towns

It is so hard to leave—until you leave. And then it is the easiest goddamned thing in the world. -Paper Towns

Elsewhere the landscape is more frank.
The light falls without letup, blindingly. - A Life, Sylvia Plath

Spelling issues:

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**given

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**too

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**we're

**meant

 

Grammar issues:

No period at the end. Or any punctuation. Or line breaks. It's basically a really long run-on sentence.

 

Other:

"other missing half" Unless he's missing both halves, I'm fairly sure this makes no sense.