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Cannot See

October 8, 2009
By AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-
XxIll tell you Im an orphan after you meet myy familyXx


Heartbreaking pain
may try to reign
my life,
my mind,
my soul.
"My kingdom numb
my will is done
now let me rest in peace"
rest wont come
and all my pain
to you are hidden.
You do not see me.
What color are my tearstains?
My pain
is all invisible.
Nothing to see.


The author's comments:
another poem that is part of my destruction is beautiful collection

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RoryP, said...
on Dec. 19 2009 at 6:39 am
RoryP,, West Haven, Connecticut
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Very beautiful work, I loved it. Keep on doing what you're doing. =)

on Nov. 19 2009 at 3:04 pm
calephchad BRONZE, Guin, Alabama
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This one's my favourite out of all of them! Whoo! Hahahaha.

on Nov. 10 2009 at 3:54 pm
astrostar2 DIAMOND, Congers, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Nothing is impossible, it is either probable or improbable.

I was moved very deeply by this poem's diction and metaphors. I also love how "less is more" in this poem-- so many emotions are expressed in this concise work. Great job!

on Nov. 4 2009 at 11:29 pm
foreverdreaming14 PLATINUM, Redmond, Washington
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I loved it. It is very short and powerful, you are a great writer so keep doing what you are doing.

on Nov. 2 2009 at 9:58 am
AndThisIsReal PLATINUM, Broadalbin, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Dans chaque fil il y a un debut.

Hayz is right.

Good: Feeling & flow.

on Nov. 1 2009 at 9:05 pm
Hayz~Hardcore SILVER, Johnstown, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
"peace on earth"

I absolutly love this poem i love the emotion that is poured into it...are u a deep writer and are u into deep poems if soo pls check out mind and let me know wat u think...Nobody has yet :( but anyway love the poem its really good