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We Dance

June 14, 2010
By inherownlittleworld SILVER, Moscow, Pennsylvania
inherownlittleworld SILVER, Moscow, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"You have brains in your head'
You have feet in your shoes,
You can steer yourself in any
direction you choose.
Your on your own,
and you know what you Know,
you are the guy
who'll decide
where to go."
- Dr. Seuss

We’re all just sitting
Shifting uncomfortably
Then comes a loud crash
And it all comes down at once.
I start running out side so fast
You’d think it was diamonds that were falling,
Not simple liquid.
Steam rises from the sidewalk
from the cool rain
And the warm day.
Meeting on the pavement
Like a greeting.
And I start dancing.
The wet grass
Now sparkling like jewels,
Tickles my bare feet.
And I can’t think of anything
More amazing.

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This article has 6 comments.

iDogrocker said...
on Jul. 22 2010 at 5:35 pm
iDogrocker, Lebanon, Oregon
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Short and sweet. You did a great job of creating an image in the reader's mind. I love to see that :)

on Jul. 17 2010 at 6:58 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

This was beautiful, short, simple, and well-worded, your emotions came through very clearly.

on Jul. 17 2010 at 6:40 pm
smart_blonde GOLD, Reno, Nevada
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This poem is so simple, yet it says so much. that is what peotry is all about, saying more with less. I think that this was a great concept.

on Jul. 17 2010 at 6:23 pm
mudpuppy BRONZE, Orangeburg, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 475 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of cheese and flower petal sometimes it's soft and sweet, sometimes it just plain stinks. - M.J.

The sweet moments of summer. Brilliant. :) I love it!

riley... GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2010 at 2:56 pm
riley... GOLD, Yakima, Washington
13 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"i became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity." edgar allen poe.

i loved the ending. like a_dreamer said... it really gets a lot in in only a little bit of poetry... i loved the last two lines. good job

on Jul. 14 2010 at 6:38 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Part of the J7X team. :)

I like this poem, short and simple. :) This is my favorite poem of the ones you have submitted, good job!