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Mermaid

August 8, 2011
By inkblot13 PLATINUM, Auburn, New York
inkblot13 PLATINUM, Auburn, New York
41 articles 1 photo 162 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I knew where poems came from, I'd go there"




- Michael Langley, 'Staying Alive'


Thrown into the sea as a young girl,
from the dolphins she learned to swim
And the fish lent her gills,
so she could breathe and dream among them under the sea
Others gave her scales to cover herself, so she would fit in
And over time, from never walking, her legs were woven together by the many multicolored scales given to her
Her hair grew long and nearly colorless,
She hadn't seen the sun in so long...
One day, curiosity got the best of her
and she went up to the surface
Singing a whale song in her lovely soprano range, she looked up to the sky in wonder
Almost in a trance, she stayed there for hours
Gazing, dreaming, wondering, and wishing of a life above the waves
Until a ship came, parts gilded in gold
Crewmen aboard saw her and waved their hats in the air
They were screaming something she couldn't quite understand
But it sounded like
Mermaid



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InkWriter13 said...
on Jun. 22 2012 at 12:59 am
Certainly intruiging. I like how you begin. A completely different take on mermaids. Good ending. Has a whimsical air that works well with this piece. Seems a little abrupt from transitioning from she hadn't seen the sun in so long to one day, curiousity... But other than, I love the concept. Very unique and insightful. Loved it. 5 stars.

on Jun. 21 2012 at 11:31 am
inkblot13 PLATINUM, Auburn, New York
41 articles 1 photo 162 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I knew where poems came from, I'd go there"




- Michael Langley, 'Staying Alive'

Thank you so much! (And wow, my thanks is way overdue! lol)

on Jun. 21 2012 at 11:30 am
inkblot13 PLATINUM, Auburn, New York
41 articles 1 photo 162 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I knew where poems came from, I'd go there"




- Michael Langley, 'Staying Alive'

Thank you!

on Jun. 21 2012 at 11:29 am
inkblot13 PLATINUM, Auburn, New York
41 articles 1 photo 162 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I knew where poems came from, I'd go there"




- Michael Langley, 'Staying Alive'

Thanks! :D

on Sep. 8 2011 at 10:04 am
biggerinfinities SILVER, Superior, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 356 comments

Favorite Quote:
“We accept the love we think we deserve.”
― Stephen Chbosky, The Perks of Being a Wallflower

wow this is really beautiful. i love the imagery and the feeling, but it also has the feeling of a fairytale. nice work!

on Aug. 12 2011 at 1:53 pm
Regs_the_Shorty GOLD, Frankfort, Illinois
13 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are people who finish what they start and.....

Really good I liked the way you wrote it very detailed

on Aug. 12 2011 at 1:02 pm
BriarRose PLATINUM, Seneca, Illinois
24 articles 7 photos 162 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't need a rose. I want a daisy you picked for my hair. I don't want some fancy box of chocolate. I want a pink frosting cookie you made just for me. Lets skip the upscale restaraunt and have a picnic in the park.

this is pretty! you did a wonderful job of painting a picture with your words.  And the ending was excellent.

 

BriarRose