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Carnival Kiss

August 18, 2011
By ninjamuffin SILVER, Billings, Montana
ninjamuffin SILVER, Billings, Montana
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Favorite Quote:
"People are often unreasonable, illogical, and self-centered. Love them anyway."
Mother Teresa

The Kiss
Our First, as sweet as the cotton candy that turned our lips blue,
filled with gentle power, shy affection
On top of the Ferris Wheel,
the night lights shining like our eyes

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on Nov. 4 2012 at 10:12 pm
AnthonyDavidHall PLATINUM, Valrico, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth." - Oscar Wilde

This has potential to be majorly awesome. It's jarringly short, though. You should extend it. The carnival metaphor is fun, so play around with it.

on Sep. 10 2011 at 1:31 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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I like it, but the second line seems a bit long. Maybe you could break it a little.

msn9896 GOLD said...
on Aug. 27 2011 at 10:29 pm
msn9896 GOLD, Billings, Montana
11 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have my own particular sorrows, loves, delights; and you have yours. But sorrow, gladness, yearning, hope, love, belong to all of us, in all times and in all places. Music is the only means whereby we feel these emotions in their universality. ~H.A. Overstreet

Beautiful :)