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Uprising After Fifty-one Days

August 27, 2012
By Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
18 articles 5 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now


Book: poem
Gone fifty-one days; away from me.
Brown eyes that belongs to I,
catches you from afar.

Gone fifty-one days; away from me.
And I've realized the bridge wasn't set aflame... at least for me.
Drawn by your closeness,
My feet and legs take over, walking me towards you.
Words form; sound echoes, bouncing to you from me.
"hello"
My senses are given back to me.
I regain control of myself, so I scurry back to my abode.
COWARD I am!

Heart pounding, from tying not to faint.
Hands shaking, from the nervousness you gave me.
Head hurting, from tying to figure out who or what made today be the day I would see you again:
Fate?
God?
Destiny?
The devil?

Gone fifty-one days; away from me.
Unknown miles apart.
Feelings I suppressed now submerged releasing these symptoms I wanted no more!

Please, come in; come closer and decrease the amount of inches of how far apart we are.
This will absolutely help me deal with your uprising.
I want to cry right now.
Tears from finally seeing you but also tears from being tongued tied.

Gone fifty-one days; away from me.
Noticing differences that hurts my heart.

Gone fifty-one days; away from me.
Abracadabra! You appear.
But two minutes can't make up for fifty-one days.

I don't want to cry right now.
I want to punch the white wall behind me and shout your name, for you to come back and not increase the unknown miles...
because I might not see you again.


The author's comments:
When people reappear.

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on Apr. 12 2013 at 9:50 pm
jmitchbb SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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Wow, this is incredible and your structure makes it even better!

on Oct. 16 2012 at 7:05 pm
awesomelyme GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Akthough the truth may hurt, not knowing is the worst kind of punishment.

Please please please get in contact with me, i need to speak with yu.

EMarie GOLD said...
on Sep. 19 2012 at 9:30 pm
EMarie GOLD, Joplin, Missouri
19 articles 7 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Courage comes in all sizes, but fits only a few.
What is wise is not always right and what is right is not always wise.
Knowing what is wrong and right is not choosing which to fight.
-All of these are by me

Wow, I'm speechless. It was absolutely incredible. Now you're making me cry. It is so good and I relate to every single line. Seriously... I'm speechless.

on Sep. 3 2012 at 1:26 pm
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
18 articles 5 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now

Thank you for the comment :-)

on Sep. 3 2012 at 1:25 pm
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
18 articles 5 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now

Thank you for being captivated by my poem about :-)

on Sep. 2 2012 at 7:37 pm
AcidRoses SILVER, Elmont, New York
8 articles 0 photos 106 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Many that live deserve death and some that have died deserve life, can you give that to them? Do not be to hasty to deal out death and judgement, even the very wise cannot see all ends."


"Can't get no more free randy!"

Beautiful :') Haha, great job

on Sep. 2 2012 at 7:36 pm
Padoodallee GOLD, Haven, Kansas
13 articles 0 photos 120 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I saw the angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." -Michelangelou

I love they way you chop up the sentences. It makes me read them more carefully and pay attention to every word.