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i am a tree

November 29, 2012
By crissypenguin PLATINUM, Sixmile, South Carolina
crissypenguin PLATINUM, Sixmile, South Carolina
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only you can control you


i am carved from leaves to roots
scarred, making memories
every season the leaves change
colorful and bright to dark adn nothing
red to green, orange to yellow, purple to brown then gone
changing year around
breaking away my imperfecsious limbs to make new
sprouting out to make me known
shaking all about like dancing in the rain
loving children play and smile
while climbing my branches to pluck the prettiest leaf
leafs fall like sprinkles onto cake
my dream is to become a new beautifully built home



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on Dec. 11 2012 at 12:08 pm
crissypenguin PLATINUM, Sixmile, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
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thanks alot for the feedback ill defintly try the spell and grammer check :)

CammyS SILVER said...
on Dec. 5 2012 at 7:54 am
CammyS SILVER, Papillion, Nebraska
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No passion in the world is equal to the passion to alter someone else's draft.
H. G. Wells
Don't say the old lady screamed. Bring her on and let her scream.
Mark Twain

I really got where you were coming from, and I liked the idea behind the poem. But there are a lot of grammer and spelling mistakes that sort of take away from the poem. Next time, before you submit, maybe running a spell/grammer check on the piece would help. Hope I helped!