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Ocean of an Iris

June 5, 2014
By SabrinaFaire SILVER, Odenville, Alabama
SabrinaFaire SILVER, Odenville, Alabama
5 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You aren't going to impose the patriarchal paradigm on ME." Alaska Young

I see his lips meeting
meeting once more,
but I do nothing but dive,
into his personal sea.
The waves roar as his livid passion
escapes his lips,
but I stare;
in his oceans.

The author's comments:
I wrote this piece before I started dating my present-boyfriend. He honestly has the clearest, brightest of blue eyes, just like the Caribbean sea. And I would catch myself not even listening to what he was saying, just staring into his eyes like a love-sick lunatic (Yeah, I was pretty crazy about him.

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This article has 11 comments.

on Aug. 31 2014 at 9:40 pm
sullivano17 PLATINUM, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You can't make up anything anymore. The world itself is a satire. All you're doing is recording it. - Art Buchwald

Love this poem! I love the metaphor of the ocean. It makes it very mysterious and intruiging in a beautiful way. keep on writing(:

Longlegs GOLD said...
on Jul. 18 2014 at 7:53 am
Longlegs GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
16 articles 0 photos 84 comments
Love it! Your author's comment really added more meaning to it. Longer would be awesome!

on Jul. 10 2014 at 1:28 pm
Sparrow01 SILVER, Appalachin, New York
8 articles 0 photos 30 comments
Aw this is really cute, especially since it has a happy ending :)

on Jul. 2 2014 at 5:50 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Leave nothing but footprints,
Take nothing but pictures,
Kill nothing but time.

lovely. :)

on Jun. 30 2014 at 1:26 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
325 articles 10 photos 1165 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Love the title and the poem! keep it up!! XD

on Jun. 27 2014 at 9:48 am
Sissybug2012 PLATINUM, Union, Missouri
36 articles 0 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
"the greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return." -MOULIN ROUGE (song lyrics)

Short but informative

on Jun. 26 2014 at 2:22 pm
MissExploration BRONZE, Vancouver, Washington
1 article 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
It Can Only Fly When It Needs To.

I got your point across in this poem, though your "Author's comment" made it much more clear to what you meant. 

HudaZav SILVER said...
on Jun. 24 2014 at 10:42 am
HudaZav SILVER, Toronto, Other
8 articles 6 photos 390 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible; the word itself says 'I'm possible'!" -Audrey Hepburn

Even though not every one can relate to this, I think every one can feel the intense emotions and details. Good work! 

on Jun. 23 2014 at 11:14 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

I've never had experience in this, but this is sweet. It's also great; 5/5! : ) thank you, for sharing this!

on Jun. 22 2014 at 10:47 pm
SabrinaFaire SILVER, Odenville, Alabama
5 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You aren't going to impose the patriarchal paradigm on ME." Alaska Young

Hahaha, yeah, this really isn't my best piece. I was just trying to get something posted right when I made my account! However I think the point of reading poetry is to interpret different words into something else.

on Jun. 22 2014 at 9:11 pm
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

this piece was intricately written and i enjoyed reading it however i would not have been able to make snse of it without the author's comments. It is beautifully written but you also want to make sure ur readers understand ur gorgeous nonsense^^