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Another evening

July 26, 2010
By Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

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I walk the road that paves the skies
Celestial scenes caress my eyes

My fingers trace the setting sun
The song of angels has just begun

My footsteps rhyme with the solemn words
The sky is strung with rainbow birds

I shake the hands of ancient oaks
With sad, old stories and paper cloaks

Winds of worlds take me on the run
And my clothes are all undone

I smoke a pipe and drink some tea
With the peaceful monks that built the sea

I hear the language of the flowers
And beasts of old throughout the hours

The hour comes; saying goodbye to light
I stroll into the endless night

Shadows tread the depths of nights
And heroes rein throughout the day

Evening, a time in which there alights
Peace and reverence for the ways
Of night and day

© Jovee B., Dededo, Guam

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quirks SILVER said...
on Sep. 4 2010 at 3:26 pm
quirks SILVER, Kingwood, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;After all, to the well-organized mind, death is but the next great adventure.&quot;<br /> &quot;The trouble is, humans do have a knack for choosing precisely those things that are worst for them.&quot;<br /> -Albus Dumbledore, Harry Potter and the Sorcerer&#039;s Stone; JKRowling

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Very well done! "My footsteps rhyme with the solemn words" is perhaps the best line I've read on here.
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 3 2010 at 6:45 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

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Thank you both for the compliment and for taking the time to comment! Although the word beautiful is often overused, there is nothing that pleases me more than to hear that I have created something that can be described as such.
Inherinerd GOLD said...
on Sep. 3 2010 at 3:15 pm
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
16 articles 9 photos 302 comments

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A word to the wise ain&#039;t nessecary it&#039;s the stupid ones that need the advise

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This is very beautiful
chrisbriones GOLD said...
on Sep. 2 2010 at 11:54 pm
chrisbriones GOLD, Anaheim, California
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&quot;I believe nothing can be justly and completely explained by words.&quot;

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You're very much welcome. And i would very much appreciate that as well.
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 1 2010 at 7:21 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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You're very welcome! You did a great job of the strange combination I think! You are amazing you have an incredible talent :) keep it up
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 31 2010 at 6:36 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

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I thank you dearly. Though I must say, the world I meant to describe was a strange combination of a 'fantasy' world and our very own. Thanks for commenting!
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 30 2010 at 5:36 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

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Thanks, and sure thing... but I am procrastinating with a history project as I speak. I must get back to you later, but very soon!
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 30 2010 at 5:35 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

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Thanks very much. You comment so sincerely and so beautifully! I feel like I have done insufficiently with commenting on your own wonderful work. I will read the rest of your pieces when I find a bit more time. Thanks!
Marlyre PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 29 2010 at 8:41 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
21 articles 0 photos 208 comments

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&quot;when you cry, do you waste your tears?&quot; Madonna

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this poem goes in a heartbeat! good stuff! read some of mine?
chrisbriones GOLD said...
on Aug. 29 2010 at 5:20 pm
chrisbriones GOLD, Anaheim, California
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&quot;I believe nothing can be justly and completely explained by words.&quot;

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Your love and recognition of nature and all its glory-- despite how minor the detail-- is profound. You clearly reflect just that in you writing: the images you evoke are gentle, but strong; an ethereal depth is noticeable when reading closely--so close that the poem  lulls you into your crafted world; your words are carefully chosen and each specially appointed in such a suitable manner; and your train off thought never loses the reader-- as if you guide them by the hand-- up until the last stanza.

The last stanza: the final punch in your sucessful attempt in portraying your love of evening.

Very good job. I hold no negative criticism.

alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 29 2010 at 4:59 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

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This is a very beautiful poem indeed! It takes you to another world! I agree it's magical I love this!
JohnDeereGirl DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 6:38 pm
JohnDeereGirl DIAMOND, Westerlo, New York
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&quot;I&#039;d rather be hated for who I am, than loved for who I&#039;m not&quot; <br /> &quot;Somewhere betweeen us talking, you saying I deserve better, and you making me laugh when I wanted to cry, I fell in love with you.&quot;

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It was beautiful! It was deffanitly like magic...
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 6:36 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

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Thank you so much! I hope that the world was an enjoyable one to visit.
JohnDeereGirl DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 6:29 pm
JohnDeereGirl DIAMOND, Westerlo, New York
61 articles 36 photos 216 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I&#039;d rather be hated for who I am, than loved for who I&#039;m not&quot; <br /> &quot;Somewhere betweeen us talking, you saying I deserve better, and you making me laugh when I wanted to cry, I fell in love with you.&quot;

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This is so beautiful! I love is soo much! It was like it took me into a different world.
Chibbie1 PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 26 2010 at 9:30 pm
Chibbie1 PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
38 articles 8 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
Reach for the the moon for if you fail you land amongst the stars :)

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lol your welcom :)
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 22 2010 at 8:51 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

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Thank you for your kind compliment.
Chibbie1 PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 22 2010 at 6:48 pm
Chibbie1 PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
38 articles 8 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
Reach for the the moon for if you fail you land amongst the stars :)

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It felt like i was actually there and time just stopped. Your writing is great and thank you for the compliment. :)