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Usual life

December 9, 2014
By joebro SILVER, Compton, California
joebro SILVER, Compton, California
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Favorite Quote:
Dreams are like a box of chocolates, if you hold on and think about them for to long it will all start to melt away.


anotheer person dead on my block why am i not surprised

go ahead and tell his mother so you can see the tears fall from her eyes,

you took a man's life like it was nothing

i don't know what you on but you tripping off of something,

 

to go out in the streets and kill other kill other men

i couldnt stomach the feeling i woud have barfed right then,

blocks after blocks shots after shots

seeing stains on the ground looking like blood clots

 

robbing women and children, killing a husband and his wife

this is nothing unexpected from the usual life



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Mckay ELITE said...
on Mar. 3 2015 at 9:53 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Your diction and intense feeling is spot on. All I would say is that you space some of the lines that way it's a little more clear. But I do think you have a knack for writing about intense thing such as the ones you described in this poem.

joebro SILVER said...
on Feb. 23 2015 at 11:43 am
joebro SILVER, Compton, California
9 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dreams are like a box of chocolates, if you hold on and think about them for to long it will all start to melt away.

thank you means a lot coming from someone as great as yourself.

RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 18 2015 at 2:34 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison

Wow, great use of language! Amzing, ya never fail to excite me Joe!